Talk:Nursery Cryme/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 12:45, 27 March 2018 (UTC)


 * I'll take this one, it's Peter Gabriel-era after all. FunkMonk (talk) 12:45, 27 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Look, the Collins era is not that bad; if you started at Invisible Touch, you started at the synth-pop "if you like the 80s so much, why don't you go and live there?" .... but anyway


 * Am I the only one seeing a licence tag for the fair use image written in non-Latin letters?
 * No, it's not just you. Gosh, that was added by an IP over 10 years ago, and I've not seen it on any other FUR album covers. Anyway, gone. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  19:18, 27 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Turns out it was Georgian... FunkMonk (talk) 11:54, 29 March 2018 (UTC)


 * This image could need a description template on Commons.
 * I've added one, though I could do with a native German speaker (wave to ) to double-check it. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  19:18, 27 March 2018 (UTC)
 * I'm no expert but looks good. I just added some templates and stuff. Good luck with your nom. Regards SoWhy 20:33, 27 March 2018 (UTC)


 * "years after Nursery Cryme" Why not just give the date?
 * Done Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  19:18, 27 March 2018 (UTC)


 * "bassist / guitarist" Should there really be a space?
 * I haven't a clue - it looks okay to me. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  13:26, 29 March 2018 (UTC)


 * "Some songs didn't" As always, contractions are discouraged...
 * Reworded <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  13:26, 29 March 2018 (UTC)


 * "Charisma didn't promote", "it wasn't as good", " it doesn't quite matter". Likewise.
 * I've reworded the first two, the third is a quotation <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  13:26, 29 March 2018 (UTC)


 * Perhaps a bit strange that the text about the cover is under "Recording", maybe rename then section "Recording and cover" or similar? Or maybe it would fit better under release?
 * I think the cover should go in a separate section - it makes more sense if the reader looks at what "The Musical Box" is about first. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  13:26, 29 March 2018 (UTC)


 * "Gabriel, having grown up in a Victorian manor house, incorporated themes of violence and sex into the song" Maybe more obvious to Brits, but what's the connection? Perhaps link to Victorian morality or some such?
 * I haven't clue (I don't think I wrote this bit), so I've trimmed it down <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  13:26, 29 March 2018 (UTC)


 * "The track was recorded with Gabriel and Collins singing the song as a duet." Their voices are similar, any word on how this affected their work together?
 * I've added a footnote <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  13:26, 29 March 2018 (UTC)


 * "the first hermaphrodite" Link?
 * Done <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  13:26, 29 March 2018 (UTC)


 * "and charted there again in March 1984" How come?
 * Virgin Records bought out Charisma and re-issued it. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  13:26, 29 March 2018 (UTC)


 * "It has been one of Genesis' most popular bootlegs" But has it ever been released officially?
 * Not as far as I know. According to this Rolling Stone piece, Gabriel's pretty unhappy about it being spread over YouTube so I can't imagine he'd been particularly keen to issue it officially. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk)  <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  13:26, 29 March 2018 (UTC)


 * "move away from their earlier folk-oriented sound into progressive rock with a more aggressive direction, with substantially improved drumming." Only stated in intro.
 * The sentence "The group felt that Collins' was easily the best drummer they had worked with at that point, and his playing style and musical tastes gave a new dimension to their sound covers the drumming bit, the individual prose for the songs covers the "aggressive", for the rest I've reworded it. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  13:26, 29 March 2018 (UTC)


 * Right, everything here looks good to me, so passed! FunkMonk (talk) 14:44, 29 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Good show - shame we couldn't stop Harold the Barrel cutting off all his toes and serving them for tea so he hasn't got a leg to stand on .... er, yes, good review as ever, cheers! <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  15:27, 29 March 2018 (UTC)