Talk:OS X Mountain Lion/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jasper Deng (talk · contribs) 02:48, 4 October 2012 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Disclaimer: it should be noted that I have a personal bias against Apple, but I will try my best to make this review objective. If you feel that my review was affected by my bias, then please feel free to request another review.
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Some grammar fixes are needed; "Notification Center is added to the operating system" is one of those places that need a fix. In addition, be very careful when saying that "Game Center" was the only negative of the OS (watch out when you use the word "only"). Fundamentally, many statements about having a new feature need to make it more clear that we're comparing Mountain Lion with Lion. While it may not be a big issue, mentioning Facebook integration in a lead section of that size is rather WP:UNDUE to me. And finally, when you say Mountain Lion gained iOS features in the lead, which I know it did, please make a little bit more mention of how so in the body of the article.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * On a stylistic note, consider reducing the amount of quoting in the Reception section; there are many reasons to like and dislike an OS.
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * Oops, File:Mac OS X Messages screenshot.png had no non-free rationale for this particular article and had to be removed. Also, how relevant is the Moscone West image relevant to the history section? It doesn't seem to show much more than what can be described in text.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I would say it's about 80-85% of the way there. My main concerns are about the quality of the prose, but I know this is difficult and this doesn't need too much work to pass.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I would say it's about 80-85% of the way there. My main concerns are about the quality of the prose, but I know this is difficult and this doesn't need too much work to pass.