Talk:Observer (video game)/GA1

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 15:29, 1 May 2018 (UTC)


 * I'll look at this one now. Courcelles (talk) 15:29, 1 May 2018 (UTC)


 * Unless you have some kind of qualifier, like "three months later", you need to repeat the year on "and for macOS and Linux on 24 October."
 * "He can hack people's brain implants with a device known as the Dream Eater, for interrogation purposes.[1][4][5][6][7][8]" Do we need six citations for one sentence? WP:OVERCITE seems to apply here.
 * "a Cracovian detective" Time to link Krakow here, not the section below.  Also, why are you using such an unusual spelling of the city's name, is it what the game uses?
 * It is simply a variation fo the word. Cognissonance (talk) 16:42, 1 May 2018 (UTC)


 * "He awakes realising he has been hacking into the murdered Jack's neural implant but cannot recall plugging into it. Daniel follows a trail of the killer's blood to the attic, where he is ambushed and knocked unconscious." He falls asleep before being knocked unconscious?
 * Rewrote to clarify. Cognissonance (talk) 16:42, 1 May 2018 (UTC)


 * "although visual effects looked" Although the visual effects"
 * Otherwise looks good. Courcelles (talk) 15:48, 1 May 2018 (UTC)
 * Good work, promoting. Courcelles (talk) 16:48, 1 May 2018 (UTC)