Talk:Oh Land (album)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 18:26, 3 February 2018 (UTC)


 * Lead and infobox
 * For this part (and was evidently signed to the label in 2009), what do you mean by “evidently”?
 * Done – I switched out the word to "eventually"; I think I initially meant this anyway. Carbrera (talk) 09:06, 12 February 2018 (UTC).


 * Background
 * Please link Oh Land on the first instance that you mention her.
 * Done


 * For this part (which was self-produced and administered by Fake Diamond Records.), I am not sure what “administered” means in this context. Could you clarify or use a different word?
 * Done


 * For this part (Oh Land released Fauna, her debut album which was self-produced and administered by Fake Diamond Records.), I would move the phrase “her debut album” in front of the album title.
 * Done


 * I am not certain if this part (, which lasted until 2009) is necessary.
 * Done


 * Composition and lyrics
 * Link the genres in the first sentence.
 * Done


 * I am not certain about this part (, where she "defies doctor's orders" by continuing to pursue her dreams). Something about the quote makes the information sounds a little too sensational if that makes any sense. I would suggest paraphrasing to better keep with Wikipedia’s overall tone.
 * Reworded


 * For this part ( Single "Sun of a Gun" uses a metaphor), I find the opening part “Single” a little awkward, and would remove it as it breaks the flow of the section.
 * Done


 * For this part (The style of the track is similar to the work of Marina and the Diamonds, according to BBC Music's Fraser McAlpine.), I would just say ( BBC Music's Fraser McAlpine wrote that the track’s style was similar to the work of Marina and the Diamonds) to avoid the rather awkward sentence construction of its current iteration.
 * Done


 * Promotion
 * I would move the image to the left to avoid having her look away from the page.
 * Done


 * I would include the location in the image caption.
 * Done


 * For this part (Other videos displayed Oh Land recreating), I am not sure that “recreating” is the correct word for this context.
 * Done


 * Do you really need a link for “trash cans”?
 * Done


 * Vevo is linked more than once. The same comment applies for Billboard
 * Done


 * Critical reception
 * Unlink Billboard
 * Done


 * Slant Magazine should be in italics.
 * Done


 * Final comments
 * Wonderful work on this! Once my comments are addressed, I will be more than happy to promote this as a GA. Aoba47 (talk) 03:18, 4 February 2018 (UTC)
 * Just a reminder on this. Aoba47 (talk) 02:27, 8 February 2018 (UTC)
 * – This should be done by this weekend if that is alright with you. Carbrera (talk) 05:22, 9 February 2018 (UTC).
 * That works for me. Aoba47 (talk) 05:30, 9 February 2018 (UTC)
 * – All done! Thanks so much. Lemme know if you need some help with anything! Carbrera (talk) 09:06, 12 February 2018 (UTC).


 * Verdict
 * Wonderful job with this article! I will ✅ it. Aoba47 (talk) 17:09, 12 February 2018 (UTC)