Talk:Old Man Willow/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 17:15, 16 February 2023 (UTC)


 * : Many thanks for the review. I've responded to all the comments. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:18, 16 February 2023 (UTC)


 * I always appreciate the hasty response! Per your changes implemented I am now happy to pass yet another great Tolkien article for GA status. Congrats!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 20:11, 16 February 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check
Earwig says good to go. Quotations are used in-line with WP:COPYQUOTE.
 * Noted.

Files
All images used are appropriate, relevant, of good quality and copyright-free:
 * : valid non-free use rationale;
 * : CC-BY-SA 4.0;
 * : CC-BY-SA 2.0;
 * : valid public domain rationale (via CC0 1.0 dedication);
 * : CC-BY-SA 4.0;
 * : valid non-free use rationale.


 * Noted.

Prose

 * I would wikilink the first mentions of Oxford in the lead and body for the benefit of non-British readers.
 * Done.


 * I am slightly unsure about § Context. The article has a lot of article sections with only a few sentences. Would it look strange if it were merged into § Narrative somewhere? Perhaps Old Man Willow's appearance in The Adventures of Tom Bombadil could be merged to its already existing mention in § Interpretations.
 * It's purely Tolkien context, not interpretation, and I've kept it as brief as possible.
 * Fair enough, perhaps I am too familiar with Tolkien at this point!


 * Does the image of the sketch map have to be so large?
 * For many plausible settings of how users view thumbnail images, yes, or the text labels will be sub-pixel in size.
 * Noted.


 * "As Tolkien explains in the narrative of The Lord of the Rings" – would wikilinking narrative to Narrative structure of The Lord of the Rings be a stretch?
 * Probably, this isn't about the structure.
 * Agreed.


 * May be personal taste, but should § Narrative be written in past tense? I am not sure if you wrote this one, but all of your other nominated Middle-earth GAs are written in present tense. I am not familiar with our literature nor fiction policies; are both tenses acceptable? (If so, than ignore this rant!)
 * Present it is.


 * "who 'sang' to the" – what do the apostrophes indicate?
 * Removed.


 * "Once safely in Tom Bombadil's house, Bombadil explained" – change to "Once safely in Bombadil's house, he explained"
 * Fixed.


 * "They write that trees (like other creatures) are in Tolkien's world subject to the corruption" – recommend "They write that trees (like other creatures in Tolkien's world) are subject to the corruption" for better flow IMO.
 * Done.


 * The sentence starting "They state that while Tolkien's writings" is really long and jaded, especially with several different punctuation marks. I would split "and that Tolkien succeeds" into its own sentence.
 * Done.


 * "in Genesis, the Cross, the tree of death in the Gospels" – cross does not have to be capitalised.
 * Fixed.


 * "Revelation (22:2)" – none of the other books are wikilinked nor do they have verses.
 * Linked Book of Genesis. This verse is both much less familiar than the Genesis story, and significant for mentioning a tree.
 * Oh, I see! That does make sense.


 * "Old Man Willow, along with the Old Forest and Tom Bombadil, was not included" – recommend "Old Man Willow, along with the Old Forest and Tom Bombadil, are not included"
 * Reworded.


 * Is there a more reliable source for Old Man Willow in Khraniteli?
 * It's just the TV play itself. I can't find anything better on this small point.
 * Sad how Old Man Willow is forgotten by the media ):

Refs
Passes spotcheck—no concerns with any of the Primary citations nor refs 1, 3, 4 or 7. No formatting issues either. Nice work!
 * Noted.

Other
Short desc, Notes, nav, other templates and cats all good.
 * Noted.


 * Just needs WP:ALT text.
 * Added.
 * Thank you!