Talk:Oliver Bjorkstrand/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 18:53, 23 October 2021 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this! —  Ghost River  18:53, 23 October 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * Might be worth including the IPA pronunciation of his surname (pronunciation guide can be found here
 * Delink "Danish" per MOS:OVERLINK ✅

Early life

 * Comma after "in Herning, Denmark" per MOS:GEOCOMMA ✅

Playing career

 * First three paragraphs should be under a level 3 subhead called "Junior" ✅
 * Link the first instances of "goals", "assists", and "points" ✅
 * Remove "2012" in "By December 2012", as we know it should be sometime around there based on the prior sentence and the Top Prospects Game ✅
 * Link first instance of hat trick ✅
 * Period after "with Seth Jones" creates a sentence fragment after ✅
 * Link entry-level contract ✅
 * Hat trick is sometimes hyphenated, sometimes not ✅
 * "50-goal seasons since Dennis Holland in the 1987-88 and 1988-89." "50-goal season since Dennis Holland from 1987-89" for close para/WP:LIMITED ✅
 * " a unanimous selection to the WHL's Western Conference First All-Star Team and was voted by his teammates as the Winterhawks’ Most Valuable Player." "unanimously selected to the WHL's Western Conference First All-Star Team, while his teammates voted him the Winterhawks' Most Valuable Player." (active voice, fix close para) ✅

Professional

 * "Blue Jackets American" "Blue Jackets' American" ✅
 * Link Lake Erie Monsters ✅
 * Link 2016 Calder Cup playoffs in the first paragraph ("first Calder Cup playoff appearance") and delink in the second ("Calder Cup Finals") ✅
 * Comma after "won the Calder Cup for the Monsters" ✅
 * "of making the Blue Jackets' 2016-17 opening night roster" ✅
 * Spaces around the ellipses in the Kekalainen quote, per MOS:ELLIPSIS ✅
 * Link AHL All-Star Classic ✅
 * Link trading deadline ✅
 * Comma after "player Roman Polak" ✅
 * Comma after "teammate Artemi Panarin" ✅
 * Hyphen to en dash for "2018-19 season" and link appropriately ✅
 * ""a guy that you can count on in every situation."" ""a guy that you can count on in every situation"." per MOS:LQ ✅
 * The sentence about his three career playoff game-winning goals needs some explanation; we jump from CBJ making the playoffs to that, and I'm not sure what team these GWGs are against
 * Link alternate captain ✅

International play

 * The link to the Denmark junior team should be in the second sentence, not the third ✅
 * Mention that he also made a senior appearance in 2015 ✅

Awards and honours

 * Reference needed here for Calder Cup MVP ✅

General comments

 * Photos are properly licensed and relevant
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Earwig freaked out a little about the stats. Some WP:LIMITED areas noted above

That's what I've got! Putting on hold for now, feel free to ping me with Q's. —  Ghost River  19:26, 23 October 2021 (UTC)
 * , so sorry to add to your workload but I seem to have missed the 2020–21 season because of the confusing dates. I am currently expanding it and it will need a review. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 19:00, 28 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Made a couple of small aesthetic changes on my own, and now I think it looks ready to pass! —  Ghost River  17:50, 6 November 2021 (UTC)