Talk:Omar Derdour/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 15:06, 9 March 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this review. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 15:06, 9 March 2013 (UTC)

Initial comments
This article is brief but well written and appears to cover the main aspects of Derdour's life; there's not that much information out there on him from what I can see in a Google Books, Scholar, and News search, and this article covers it. I've done some minor copyediting as I went for proofreading and style; please feel free to revert anything you disagree with. -- Khazar2 (talk) 16:47, 9 March 2013 (UTC)

A few small points:
 * What is the "Ouled Abdi" that his family belongs to? Also, should this be written in past tense ("belonged"), or are we sure they're still members?
 * Reworded, Ouled Abdi is a valley in the foothills of the Aures, reworded, should be OK now. Might blue link that in the next few days.♦ Dr. ☠ Blofeld  17:40, 9 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Omar Derdour directed the AML Party's Federation in Constantine"-- could you include a sentence or so about the AML party's platform/beliefs? Since this was Derdour's main cause, it's worth making it clear.
 * Yes, quite relevant, I've added.♦ Dr. ☠ Blofeld  17:40, 9 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Am I correct in wikilinking AML to Friends of the Manifesto and Liberty?
 * Yes, I think so.♦ Dr. ☠ Blofeld  17:27, 9 March 2013 (UTC)


 * I marked two dead links, but don't worry about that for GA purposes. -- Khazar2 (talk) 16:47, 9 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Will ask Aymatth so look into that.♦ Dr. ☠ Blofeld  17:41, 9 March 2013 (UTC)