Talk:Omkring tiggarn från Luossa/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:03, 5 June 2022 (UTC)

I will review this one today! --K. Peake 07:03, 5 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:06, 5 June 2022 (UTC)

Lead

 * The cottage being his is not sourced anywhere in the body
 * Added.
 * Can't you add a sentence about the structure/lyrics of the poem here?
 * Added.
 * "through best-selling recordings by" → "through popular recordings by"
 * Done.

Context

 * Img looks good!
 * Thanks!
 * The Dalarma birthplace is not sourced by [1]
 * Added that he was from Grangärde,[1], which is indeed in Dalarna.
 * "As a young man he worked" → "As a young man, Andersson worked"
 * Done.
 * "From 1914 he" → "From 1914, he"
 * Done.
 * "died of accidental poisoning" → "died of cyanide poisoning" with the wikilink
 * Done.

Poem

 * "published in the 1917 book Svarta Ballader;" → "published in Svarta Ballader;"
 * Done.
 * Add speech marks around "Mr. Tambourine Man" and the release year in brackets
 * Added.
 * "of his project to translate all of" → "of his translation project of" per the source not actually stating he wanted to translate the entirety; this is more accurate
 * Done.
 * "through best-selling recordings by" → "through popular recordings by" to be more neutral, especially with the source never using the term best-selling
 * Done.
 * "but that it sings of" → "but also sings of"
 * Doesn't work for me.
 * I used "though" here instead in a similar manner. --K. Peake 20:52, 5 June 2022 (UTC)


 * Merge the English translations para with the above one per that para mentioning texts helping the poem become well-known
 * Done.

Song

 * Img looks good!
 * Thanks.
 * "that Dan Andersson had emphasised" → "how Andersson had emphasised"
 * Done.
 * "In 1938 the composer" → "In 1938, the composer"
 * Done.
 * "It was set to music by" → "The poem was set to music by"
 * Done.
 * Remove English wikilink on Gunde Johansson
 * Alas, it's a bug in the interlanguage link mechanism.
 * "and it came to his mind when" → "coming to his mind when"
 * Done.
 * "In 1979 the composer" → "In 1979, the composer"
 * Done.
 * "for his funeral, and that it was" → "for his funeral and it was"
 * No, that seems wrong here, the statements are not closely coupled.
 * I'll let this one slide --K. Peake 20:52, 5 June 2022 (UTC)


 * Add the release year of Svarta ballader
 * Done.

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed, after a quick review! --K. Peake 07:50, 5 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:06, 5 June 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, good job but I did some slight copy editing! --K. Peake 20:52, 5 June 2022 (UTC)