Talk:On God/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tkbrett (talk · contribs) 16:18, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

It's time for me to be a good nominator and actually review some articles.  Tkbrett  (✉) 16:18, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

Lead

 * Young Thug teased an appearance...: "teased" seems a little unencylcopedic. Consider rewording.
 * ✅ by using indicated instead --K. Peake 07:43, 26 August 2022 (UTC)

Background

 * The phrasing of the image caption is ambiguous, since "suggested he would appear on the song over Twitter" could imply he was going to rap via Twitter, whereas I think you mean to say he suggested over Twitter that he would appear on the song.
 * ✅ --K. Peake 07:43, 26 August 2022 (UTC)


 * ...received a text message about a package he made... A package? Is this jargon with which I'm not familiar?
 * ✅ by adding sample package per the source to clarify, meaning beat samples --K. Peake 07:43, 26 August 2022 (UTC)

Composition and lyrics

 * The rapper uses his taxes paid to the Internal Revenue Service (IRS) as an excuse for the high prices of his merchandise and Yeezy sneakers, justifying them to feed his family and not have to appear on the TV series Dancing with the Stars. I don't understand what this sentence is saying after "justifying them..." Could you please clarify?
 * ✅ by re-wording the earlier part slightly and using "the prices" to clarify that these are what he justifies --K. Peake 07:43, 26 August 2022 (UTC)