Talk:On the Low/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:31, 5 April 2022 (UTC)

This article is nearly two months old, making a review wholeheartedly due! --K. Peake 07:31, 5 April 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
 * List as Elof Loelv under producer(s) since this is not a track listing
 * "who produced the track." → "who handled the production." and this should be the second sentence of the lead instead
 * Add a sentence inbetween credits and release here mentioning that the song was one of the first written for the album and when the singer previewed it
 * ""On the Low" is a downtempo" → "it is a downtempo"
 * Pipe minimal to Minimal music
 * "the single appeared below" → "the song appeared below"
 * "chart at number twelve on" → "chart, reaching number 12 on" per MOS:NUM
 * Wikilink lyric video to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "on Nyhetsmorgon and a session" → "on Nyhetsmorgon in 2018 and a 2020 session"
 * Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
 * Done. Let me know if the added sentence works or not. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
 * That is a proper addition to the lead, though I copyedited the preview part to avoid overusage of it. --K. Peake 06:43, 8 April 2022 (UTC)

Background

 * Remove comma after third studio album
 * "for the album,[2] and" → "for the album and" moving [2] solely to the end of the sentence
 * The two tracks being the only ones written by her and Loelv is not sourced
 * "said that the two spent long days" → "said that the two spent heavy time" per the source
 * Pipe minimal to Minimal music
 * "out of all tracks" → "out of all the tracks"
 * Pipe chorus to Refrain
 * "when it came to melody." → "in terms of melody."
 * "she labelled it" → "she labelled the track"
 * Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Composition and lyrics

 * Wikilink falsetto on the audio sample text
 * "minimal and detailed production backed" → "minimal and detailed production, backed" on the audio sample, with the pipe
 * Pipe bird calls to Bird vocalization
 * Pipe drums to Drum kit
 * Remove comma after percussion
 * Remove speech marks for minimalistic since this is an encyclopedic term
 * "and NME writer Hannah Mylrea characterized" → "whereas NME writer Hannah Mylrea characterized
 * "in lines such as" → "in lines such as,"
 * "the closing bird calls "transform Styrke's" → "the closing bird calls transform "Styrke's" per the source's wording
 * Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Release and promotion

 * The skateboard being over a yellow background is not sourced
 * Wikilink lyric video to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * The source mentions her performing the song in a small room and no bottom part is sourced for the lyrics
 * "Lisa Hultengren directed the video with" → "Lisa Hultengren directed the video, with"
 * Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
 * "She learnt how to" → "Styrke learnt how to"
 * Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Reception

 * "gave it a "Song of the Day" designation while writing," → "gave the track a "Song of the Day" designation, writing,"
 * Mention how Mylrea highlighted the vocals in the NME review
 * Start a new sentence at the Simon Österhof review because the NME one will be long enough on its own once expanded
 * "found it "irresistible"" → "found the song "irresistible""
 * "whispering working well" → "whispering work[s] well" in this context, as otherwise it does not read correctly
 * "He wrote, "The careful" → "He wrote that "the careful"
 * "more to discover."" → "more to discover"." per MOS:QUOTE (this is not a full sentence as the source shows)
 * "the song suffered from" → "the song suffers from"
 * "below the top 100 at number twelve on" → "at number 12 on" per MOS:NUM (previous part removal because it has already been stated)
 * Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel.
 * Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)


 * Are you sure programming is listed before synthesizer under credits; I can't check since I don't have an account?
 * Changed up the order. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Charts

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed and in all honesty, that went quick because this is a quality article; congrats! --K. Peake 09:13, 5 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for a thorough review, Kyle! Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, very good job and I would have checked through this sooner if you'd have given me a ping! --K. Peake 06:43, 8 April 2022 (UTC)