Talk:One in a Million (Bebe Rexha and David Guetta song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Benmite (talk · contribs) 04:17, 3 March 2024 (UTC)

Hi there! Gonna be reviewing this very soon. :) ben ǝʇᴉɯ  04:17, 3 March 2024 (UTC)

Overall
Gonna be honest, this is gonna take a lot to pass GA, but I think it can. I've started to leave a lot of edits below. ben ǝʇᴉɯ 20:07, 10 March 2024 (UTC)


 * I also think it could benefit from more sources.

Images
Can you add some, preferably of Rexha and Guetta?

Copyvio check
18.0%, good!

Lead

 * Remove


 * Change to


 * Change to {{tquote|Rexha and


 * Change {{tquote|The song was written by the latter two along with Burns, Martin Coogan, Scott Dittrich, Timofey Reznikov, Sarah Solovay and Ido Zmishlany, with the production completed by Guetta, Timofey Reznikov and Burns.}} to {{tquote|The song was written by Rexha, Martin Coogan, Scott Dittrich, Sarah Solovay, and Ido Zmishlany and produced by Burns, Timofey Reznikov, and Guetta, all three of whom also wrote the song.}}
 * {{done}}


 * Change {{tquote|Representing the artist's fifth collaboration}} to {{tquote|The fifth collaboration between Rexha and Guetta}}


 * Change {{tquote|Incorporating an interpolation of Guetta's single "When Love Takes Over", the song combines club, dance, EDM and pop music.}} to {{tquote|The EDM and pop song samples Guetta's 2009 single "When Love Takes Over".}}
 * {{y}}


 * Change {{tquote|Its lyrics are an homage to love with Rexha marveling at the existence of a significant other.}} to {{tquote|In its lyrics, Rexha marvels at the existence of her significant other.}}
 * {{y}}


 * Change {{tquote|garnered a warm reception}} to {{tquote|received positive reviews}}
 * {{y}}


 * Remove pipe for music critics
 * {{y}}


 * Spell out nine
 * {{y}}


 * Change {{tquote|US}} to {{tquote|U.S.}}
 * {{y}}


 * Add {{tquote|chart}} after {{tquote|Hot Dance/Electronic Songs}}
 * {{y}}


 * Remove non-notable Belgium and Netherlands chart positions from lead
 * {{removed}}


 * Change {{tquote|garnered a nomination}} to {{tquote|was nominated}}
 * {{y}}


 * Change {{tquote|the 66th edition of the Grammy Awards}} to {{tquote|the 66th Annual Grammy Awards}} with the pipe
 * {{y}}


 * Change {{tquote|Furthermore, a live rendition of the song took place}} to {{tquote|Rexha and Guetta performed the song live}}
 * {{y}}


 * Add {{tquote|at}} before {{tquote|the closing ceremony}}

Background and composition

 * Change to


 * Do we have better sources than Apple Music and Spotify for the release date/format and the writing and production credits?


 * Specify which countries it was released in


 * Add Timofey Reznikov after


 * Change to


 * New paragraph starting with


 * Change to  with the pipe


 * Remove (the first redirects to EDM, EDM is a subgenre of dance music)
 * Change to  with pre-existing pipes
 * Change to  with pre-existing pipes


 * Change to  per sources (both sources at the end of the sentence refer to it as a sample, not an interpolation)

ben ǝʇᴉɯ 20:05, 10 March 2024 (UTC)


 * Change (Rowland is featured per refs, not an addt'l artist) to  with pipe for Kelly Rowland


 * Remove and the last sentence with the lyrics—neither are supported by sources—and the refs that follow  ben ǝʇᴉɯ  04:30, 14 March 2024 (UTC)


 * Change wording of (identical to Rolling Stone wording to


 * New paragraph starting with

Reception

 * Change to
 * Remove extra ref at the end of this sentence


 * Change to


 * Add commas after and before


 * Change to


 * Remove first Los 40 quote or pick quote that is more opinionated


 * Commas after and
 * Remove if you remove the first quote


 * Remove
 * Change to


 * Add commas after and
 * Remove


 * Remove NRJ quote, not really a review


 * Remove BuzzFeed mention


 * For Billboard list, pull a quote or paraphrase from the list entry, and rewrite the sentence as


 * Change to
 * Remove ref 16 (redundant)
 * Move ref 14 to the end of the sentence

Commercial performance

 * Start new section titled Commercial performance starting with


 * Spell out nine, change US to U.S.


 * Better, non-primary sourcing for the chart dates would be ideal


 * Remove last sentence ben ǝʇᴉɯ  05:35, 14 March 2024 (UTC)

Promotion

 * Is there a better source for the release date of the music video than the video itself?


 * Change to
 * Remove pipe for futuristic per MOS:OL


 * Per WP:PLOTCITE, it's fine to only use the music video as a source for its own plot, but since this isn't really an MV with a plot per se, it would be best to find a secondary source to describe the visuals to avoid WP:NPOV (even if the visuals are not that contentious)


 * The summary of the video should be cut down considerably


 * Remove Mier and Luiz's commentary, doesn't add anything beyond what is already described in the second sentence


 * New paragraph starting with BBMAs performance
 * Change to  and add  after
 * Extend description of BBMAs performance using the three sources at the end


 * Change to
 * Add date of World Cup performance

Charts
Looks good.

Release history
Also looks good. ben ǝʇᴉɯ 20:41, 15 March 2024 (UTC)

Final comments
Sincerest apologies that it took nearly two weeks for me to complete this review, I have been really swamped with real-life responsibilities! I hope you get the time to complete making the edits, but like I mentioned above, I think additional images and more sources would be necessary for it to pass as a GA, since it is relatively bare-bones right now. ben ǝʇᴉɯ 20:48, 15 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Failing due to inactivity, but feel free to renominate! ben ǝʇᴉɯ  00:52, 27 March 2024 (UTC)