Talk:One of Those Days/GA1

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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk · contribs) 02:25, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Comments from AJona1992
 * Is "following the under-performance" - really necessary? Also "first single" isn't that a lead single?
 * Such details give readers a better view of what can be expected forward. I have changes to lead single and linked it. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 16:16, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Too many sentences have the word "the song" - needs a variety
 * Done. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * "charted" is not necessary, just start it off with "It peaked at number ..."
 * Done. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * It also charted in Belgium and Switzerland. - and what were those peaks?
 * It's only a lead. So not necessary. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * An accompanying music video ---> The single's accompanying music video ...
 * Done. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * "portrays Houston and her girlfriends taking time out and spending time at spa and a club" - is missing two words
 * Done. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 16:18, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * "the mini-concert" - sounds orish
 * Done. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 16:16, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * "In an interview with entertainment website" - no need for "entertainment website"
 * Done. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * "album: "One of Those Days" and "Dear John Letter"" - there's no need for a semi-colon. Try this Shek'speare and Reynolds penned three songs that day, two of which are featured on the album, "One of Those Days" and "Dear John Letter".
 * Done. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * A 4-track CD single was released on the next day - (1) The way you start off this sentence weakens the prose (2) A CD single does not include 4 tracks, this sounds more like a maxi single if anything.
 * Done. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * "an exclusive" - is orish
 * Done. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * The Isley Brothers (is wikilinked twice), Between the Sheets (is wikilinked twice)
 * Done. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Houston begins the song by declaring her stress: "This is just for me [...] Got to take time out [...] You don't know what I'm going through." - is just a mess. Look at Amor Prohibido (song) for a better way of representing the lyrics.
 * Done. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * File:Houston ThoseDays.ogg needs a "further rational". See File:Amor Prohibido.ogg as an example.
 * More than enough for a GA. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * "The German newspaper," is not necessary at all.
 * It is not a common newspaper. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Neither is The Dallas Morning News, but you don't see me putting: The Texas newspaper ... Jona yo!  Selena 4 ever  16:11, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
 * I assure you that it is. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 16:15, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * "the issue dated November 16, 2002" - remove
 * "the issue dated November 9, 2002" - remove
 * "the week dated January 4, 2003" - remove
 * Billboard charts are 13 days in advance. That's why we use issue dated and week ending. 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Well just saying its peak is okay, BTW can you provide any GAs that have this? Best, Jona yo!  Selena 4 ever  16:11, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * See all GAs by Beyonce. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 16:15, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
 * "and having a massage at sauna" - a word is missing here
 * I am confused. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * "a" is needed before "sauna". Jona yo!  Selena 4 ever  16:11, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Done. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 16:18, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * "Houston performed the song as the opening number of the concert to a crowd of about 4000 people" - where's the comma for 4000?
 * Done. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * "on December 10, 2002" - redundant, since you gave the date in the first sentence.
 * Done. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Please fix these concerns before I do a spotcheck and a reference check. Happy holidays, Jona yo!  Selena 4 ever  02:25, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Okay. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 16:15, 27 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Reference checking
 * FN#34 is not consistent with other Billboard publishers. Which one is it?
 * Please fix this issue before passing. Best, Jona yo!  Selena 4 ever  22:32, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Billboard was acquired by Prometheus Global Media in 2009. I was told by some experienced editors that the publisher for all BB links, before 2009 should be Nielsen Business Media and after 2009 Prometheus. That's why they look different. Novice7 (talk) 06:43, 1 January 2012 (UTC)

From What the Good article criteria are not:
 * Comment from another editor
 * Nowhere in the WP:WIAGA does it say references must be consistent.
 * "Importantly, the GA criteria are a standard, not the opinion of individual reviewers."
 * (2) Factually accurate and verifiable
 * Mistakes to avoid (excerpted):
 * Requiring the use (or non-use) of citation templates.
 * Requiring consistently formatted, complete bibliographic citations. (If you are able to figure out what the source is, that's a good enough citation for GA.)

MathewTownsend (talk) 22:11, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
 * It's common sense. A "good article" does not need to have inconsistency, look at a few other experienced GAN reviewers and check out their reviews. Best, Jona yo!  Selena 4 ever  15:35, 2 January 2012 (UTC)
 * Novice7 is right. Whatever he has done is 100% right and I bet on it. Billboard was acquired by Prometheus Global Media only in 2009. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:39, 2 January 2012 (UTC)
 * And reference 4 is from Google Book, that is the physical copy ofBillboard. Jivesh 1205 (Talk) 15:42, 2 January 2012 (UTC)