Talk:Oneworld/GA2

GA Review
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I have a few small issues with this article. There are some prose problems, which I will fix myself.

There is a comment about OneWorld being the only alliance containing an Asian Middle Eastern airline. I disagree with this because of Turkish Airlines. Yes, Turkey is also in Europe, but it has operations on its Asian side as well.
 * This is referring to where the airline is based, not its operations or where it flies to. Turkish Airlines is based in Europe's Middle East. No updates has been made.  Aviator006 (talk) 12:36, 2 September 2009 (UTC)
 * Just because it is based upon the European side of Istanbul does not mean it is not a Middle Eastern airline. No one ever talks about a 'European Middle East'. This statement in the article is far too specific and distorts the relevant information. It's like me saying that 'Oneworld is the only alliance containing an airline based in Hong Kong'. True, but irelevant. Please modify this statement.Zeus1234 (talk) 14:45, 2 September 2009 (UTC)
 * The mention of Asia's Middle East is from their official documents, but if you feel so strongly about it, I am happy to modify it. :) Aviator006 (talk) 15:08, 2 September 2009 (UTC)

I think the principal problem with this article is that it is too long. In the manual of style it states that an article should be from 30 - 50 kb Even if we remove all the references from consideration of the article size, I still believe it would be over 50 kb. The article needs to be shortened. Areas to do this in include the lead, which is quite long, and the history section which is also very long.
 * The readable prose as described in WP:SIZE for the article is 25kb (see my sandbox User:Aviator006/Sandbox), this is below the recommended limit. This included some sentences in the Lead and History removed. Aviator006 (talk) 12:36, 2 September 2009 (UTC)

I have no idea what the 'Co-location' table is for. What is a co-location?
 * Co-location description added. Aviator006 (talk) 12:36, 2 September 2009 (UTC)

I also do not think that the section about the Finnair bus is needed. It's not really relevant.
 * Agreed, removed as suggested. Aviator006 (talk) 12:36, 2 September 2009 (UTC)

I would recommend you get the article down to below 70 kb from its current length of 76 kb.
 * Readable prose is 25kb, within recommended limit as described in WP:SIZE. Aviator006 (talk) 12:36, 2 September 2009 (UTC)
 * Since you did not count the tables, I would recommend that you modify the last two tables of the article, the co-location and award tables (which IMO, are not that important) to make them hidden tables. Meaning that a user must click on the table to make it appear. This will make the article more readable. Zeus1234 (talk) 14:45, 2 September 2009 (UTC)
 * As requested, Co-location and Awards tables now hidden. Aviator006 (talk) 15:08, 2 September 2009 (UTC)

I will put the article on hold for now and wait for improvements.Zeus1234 (talk) 02:20, 28 August 2009 (UTC)
 * All comments reviewed and updated in the article accordingly. Aviator006 (talk) 12:36, 2 September 2009 (UTC)
 * Additional requests by reviewer completed. Aviator006 (talk) 15:08, 2 September 2009 (UTC)