Talk:Ontogeny and Phylogeny/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:31, 21 September 2021 (UTC)

Many thanks as always for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:46, 21 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments


 * "changes in the timing of embryonic development" I got confused reading this, perhaps put it in parentheses.
 * Done.


 * "that ontogeny recapitulates phylogeny" as this is quite technical, is there any chance of a footnote explaining it in non-expert terms?
 * Added.


 * (Aside: is there any reason the article title needs (book) as a disambiguator? There is no Ontogeny and Phylogeny article, after all)
 * Avoids confusion with "Ontogeny recapitulates phylogeny"; if you feel that's not a worry then we can move the article after this GAN is completed.
 * I don't think that's confusing so I would recommend a move after this GAN. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:21, 30 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "This later work was published..." unref sentence.
 * Added ref.


 * "fetalisation theory" any link, explanation? And I assume we're now in USEng or that would be foetalisation?
 * Used -z- as that's how Bolk's work is described. Not sure any better link than Louis Bolk is available.


 * "n Paleobiology, " that links to the science, not some kind of publication.
 * Fixed.


 * Same in the accompanying reference.
 * Fixed.


 * "noted that 2 years earlier" two
 * Fixed.


 * " ad- vanced" copy/paste issue? Fix and check others.
 * Made 2 fixes.


 * "excellently illustrated with often surprising examples, " this should be either attributed, quoted or neutralised in tone.
 * Attributed.


 * Ref 4 (along with the note above about the Paleobiology link) needs access-date and pref
 * Formatted, used jstor as source.


 * "Book preview - Google Books" en-dash.
 * Fixed.

That's it for me. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:16, 27 September 2021 (UTC)