Talk:Operation Copperhead/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Retrolord (talk · contribs) 12:05, 21 February 2013 (UTC)

Hi! I'll be taking this review. I will use the template below to assess the article against the criteria. Please mark your edits on the review page as Done when they are addressed. If there are any issues please let me know here or at my talk page. Thanks!  ★ ★ RetroLord★ ★  12:05, 21 February 2013 (UTC)

"Another factor was that, in early May, an uncontrolled agent based in Spain (who sold fictional intelligence to the Germans) had passed on details of a meeting in Gibraltar between several high-ranking Allied officers. Documents found after the war indicated the Germans found this information suspect, and that they might have treated Montgomery's appearance as equally so." Reference this please, also, it seems a bit like original research, especially the "they might have treated Montgomery's appearance as equally so" bit.
 * Well, it is referenced in the normal style... but I have added a further inline citation to make this clear. Have you read the source? "seems like original research" is not helpful feedback unless you can communicate how I have improperly interpreted the source. :) Levine describes (in some detail, actually, and as part of his analysis of this op.) how this agent communicated such a meeting to Axis intelligence some days before James landed. He then describes how it was marked "deception?? who knows?" by said intelligence agency. And goes on to explain (as I then do) that the picture was so confusing for the Germans at this point they could not unpick what was deception and what was real information. If you have suggestions for rephrasing this to address your concern then that would be helpful. --Errant (chat!) 05:49, 23 February 2013 (UTC)

"James did not enjoy the experience. Although he received equivalent pay (£10 per day) to Montgomery during the operation, it was a high-pressure assignment. Following Montgomery's public appearance on the Western Front, James was flown back to England and the Pay Corps with a warning to keep quiet." Could you rewrite this so it has a more encyclopedic tone? And can you reference it aswell please. The problem is "a warning to keep quiet" Rewrite that part please  ★ ★ RetroLord★ ★  09:24, 23 February 2013 (UTC)
 * It's unclear to me where the problem lies with this paragraph. Could you be more explicit? This is already cited to Holt & Levine. --Errant (chat!) 05:49, 23 February 2013 (UTC)
 * ✅ --Errant (chat!) 19:44, 23 February 2013 (UTC)

I'll put it on hold and see what we can fix.  ★ ★ RetroLord★ ★  02:58, 23 February 2013 (UTC)