Talk:Operation Starlite/GA1

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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 10:54, 31 March 2020 (UTC)


 * The source for "File:OperationStarlight.jpg" is dead.
 * I've replaced the dead link. Mztourist (talk) 11:07, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
 * The source given for "File:Operationstarlite1965.jpg" does not link to the image.
 * I've replaced the dead link. Mztourist (talk) 11:45, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

Gog the Mild (talk) 10:54, 31 March 2020 (UTC)

I have done some copy editing. Let me know if you are unhappy with any of it.


 * The lead is on the short side.
 * "General William Westmoreland told Walt" Walt needs to be re-introduced in the main article.
 * "At about the same time, section received corroborative information" Is ther a word or number missing before "section"?
 * Link sampan.
 * Any chance of a map showing the location of the battle within Vietnam?
 * I've added coordinates
 * "carried the high ground" An entirely correct use of "carried", but most readers won't understand it in this context. Any chance of changing it?
 * "point opposite An Cuong. Under fire from the hamlets" Should "hamlets" be singular? If not, could the other(s) be named?
 * The two long paragraphs in "Battle" need splitting.
 * ""even these were interspersed with hedgerows of hardwood and bamboo thickets. Are the opening quote marks a typo?
 * "An Cuong itself, consisted of 25-30 huts, fighting holes and camouflaged trench lines" I know what you are trying to say, but this doesn't say it.
 * "As the company cleared the first few houses" Houses or huts?
 * "1st Lt. Richard M. Purnell" If you are going to use an abbreviation, which I would advise against in this case, it should be given in brackets after the first use in full.
 * Could you give a publisher location for all books (preferred) or none.
 * Link paddies.
 * "to dispatch of "our mobile (LVT) resupply" to Company I, which, at the time, was only a "few hundred yards" in front of the command group." Could there be a cite to the source of the quotes no later than the end of the sentence.
 * "The company entered An Cuong against surprisingly little resistance" Do we need the PoV "surprisingly"?
 * "Company I, 3rd Battalion, 7th Marines on USS Iwo Jima were landed by HMM-163 helicopters shortly after 09:30." Is the time correct? It seems very out of chronological order.
 * "There it was placed under the operational control of Muir, who ordered them to" "them/"it" Which?
 * "evidently forced the VC 60th Battalion to break contact" Could we have mention of the VC 60th Battalion earlier in the "Battle" section.
 * Its there in the 3rd paragraph, LZ Blue was almost on top of the VC 60th Battalion
 * The last paragraph seems out of place. Wouldn't it fit better in the Planning section?

More to follow. Gog the Mild (talk) 14:30, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks Gog! All changes made other than as noted above. I look forward to receiving your further comments Mztourist (talk) 03:19, 5 April 2020 (UTC)


 * "few hundred yards" Could there be a cite to the source of the quote no later than the end of the sentence. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:10, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Done. Thanks Gog Mztourist (talk) 04:02, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Another good piece of work. Promoting. Gog the Mild (talk) 07:46, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks Gog, much appreciated. Battle of Xuan Loc next? Mztourist (talk) 08:08, 8 April 2020 (UTC)