Talk:Opp Amaryllis!/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:57, 17 February 2022 (UTC)

This is one of your February GANs, which I am going to take on! --K. Peake 07:57, 17 February 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much! Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:05, 17 February 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good!
 * Thanks.
 * The best-known and best-loved info should come after the reality sentence
 * Moved.
 * [1] should not be in the lead, plus that info appears to be sourced in the body anyway
 * Mm, people have a habit of removing unsupported adjectives!
 * "In reality the nymph" → "In reality, the nymph"
 * Done.
 * The waterway near Stockholm is not sourced in the body anywhere
 * I described and cited it already.
 * Add a final sentence mentioning that were multiple recordings, including Folke Andersson and Edvard Andreasson (most notable)
 * Done.

Context

 * First two paras look good!
 * Thanks.
 * Pipe Idylls to Idyll
 * Done.
 * Remove comma before the Eclogues
 * It seems to be necessary and correctly placed.

Music and verse form

 * Add relevant text to the audio sample
 * Added.
 * Pipe time to Triple metre
 * Done.
 * Pipe Menuetto to Minuet
 * Done.
 * "each of 11 lines;" → "each consisting of 11 lines;"
 * Done.
 * Pipe rhyming pattern to Rhyme scheme
 * Done.

Lyrics

 * Img looks good!
 * Thanks.
 * What parts of the first sentence is [11] used for?
 * Most of it, including the date and the opera.

Reception

 * Retitle to Reception and legacy
 * Done.
 * Img looks good!
 * Noted.
 * Do you need to use the before Bellman scholar?
 * Yes.
 * "It indeed begins, he writes," → "The composition indeed begins, Lönnroth writes,"
 * Done.
 * Start a new sentence at the young fisherman part, as the current one is a run-on
 * Split.
 * "Morpheus the god of sleep, and" → "Morpheus the god of sleep and" with the wikilink
 * Done.
 * "It plays out as a" → "This plays out as a"
 * Done.
 * Pipe pike to Esox
 * Done above, in Lyrics.
 * "In our chests"." should have the punctuation inside quotes if this is a full sentence per MOS:QUOTE; elsewise, keep as it is′
 * Done.
 * ""In thy calm embrace"." should have the punctuation inside if a full sentence per above
 * Done.
 * "in Fredman's Epistle no. 25," → "in Fredman's Epistle No. 25"
 * Fixed.
 * Wikilink imagery
 * Done.
 * "it has been recorded" → "the composition has been recorded"
 * Fixed.
 * "it was for example among the" → "it was among the" to be less wordy, but add the year this was recorded to be more specific
 * Done.

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed after this quick review! --K. Peake 09:57, 17 February 2022 (UTC)
 * Many thanks, I think that's everything done now. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:12, 17 February 2022 (UTC)
 * Quick response as expected, though you should remove the ref from the lead since people removing it is their problem and you can point to this review in any revert summaries to avoid warring, also the comma is not needed before the Eclogues because it is not in the lead. --K. Peake 21:57, 17 February 2022 (UTC)
 * I've removed the ref, but people removing such things does become an issue for article maintenance, obviously. I've reworded the Eclogues sentence for harmony. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:06, 18 February 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, good thing the ref is gone and props for your rewording of the sentence! --K. Peake 09:20, 18 February 2022 (UTC)