Talk:Orange Trees/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 08:36, 12 July 2020 (UTC)

Starting this review today or tomorrow, after I've been on a brief hiatus from them --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:36, 12 July 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Replace hlist with bullet points
 * Add the link to music video on YouTube in the infobox
 * "for her fourth studio album," → "from her fourth studio album,"
 * "It was released for" → "The song was released for"
 * Target single to Single (music)
 * "The song was written by Marina," → "It was written by Marina,"
 * "and produced by Görres." → "while produced by Görres."
 * "Several remixes of the single were produced" → "Several remixes of the song were produced"
 * "and indie pop track with a" → "and indie pop track, with a"
 * Remove wikilink on nature
 * Remove wikilink on Greece
 * "considered it a standout or" → "considered the song a standout and"
 * "it to previous single" → "it to Marina's previous single"
 * "a song that also discusses" → "a track that also discusses"
 * "while others dismissed" → "while other critics dismissed"
 * "music videos were produced for the song. The original video" → "accompanying music videos were produced and the original video" with the appropriate wikilink
 * "was released the following month." → "was released in April 2019, featuring..." with some info added
 * "in April 2019." → "that same month"
 * "It was also included on the setlist to" → "The song was also included on the setlist of"
 * All ✅. Carbrera (talk) 12:34, 15 July 2020 (UTC).

Background and release

 * "She explained that" → "She explained that,"
 * "and there wasn’t" → "and there wasn't"
 * "After the announcement, she" → "After the announcement, Marina"
 * Target single to Single (music)
 * "On 14 February 2019 she announced Love + Fear," → "On 14 February 2019, she announced Love + Fear,"
 * "the same day, revealing that "Orange Trees" is" → "that same day, revealing "Orange Trees" as"
 * "composed of two segments with" → "that is composed of two segments, with"
 * "It was written by Marina," → "The song was written by Marina,"
 * "and produced by Görres." → "while Görres handled production."
 * Img looks good
 * "on 22 March 2019 through Atlantic Records." → "as a single on 22 March 2019 through Atlantic Records."
 * "On that same day on" → "On that same day via"
 * Remove wikilink on extended play
 * "Atlantic Records commissioned several remixes" → "Atlantic commissioned several remixes"
 * "was released as a download" → "was released for digital download and streaming"
 * Add a ref at the end of the sentence to back this info up
 * "followed and were released on 31 May and 7 June," → "followed, being released on 31 May and 7 June 2019,"
 * "the last one released on 14 June." → "the last one, released for digital download and streaming on 14 June 2019."
 * "was also recorded and included on the track listing for Marina's seventh extended play," → "was recorded and included on the track listing for Marina's seventh EP,"
 * Add source for the production credit of the acoustic version
 * All ✅. Carbrera (talk) 16:44, 20 July 2020 (UTC).

Composition and lyrics

 * "and indie pop song with" → "and indie pop song, with"
 * "referred to this beat" → "referred to the beat"
 * Target chorus to Refrain
 * "when considering its" → "when considering the song's"
 * "electro-pop" and considered" → "electro-pop", while he considered"
 * "in the chord progressions of" → "in the chord progression of" with the wikilink
 * "provided by Hassle who plays the guitar" → "provided by Hassle, who plays the guitar,"
 * "Görres who plays keyboards" → "Görres, who plays keyboards"
 * "by John Hanes and" → "by John Hanes, while"
 * Wikilink Erik Hassle on the first mention in the text box
 * "on writing "Orange Trees" with Erik Hassle." → "on writing "Orange Trees" with Hassle."
 * "Lyrically, the song uses vivid imagery" → "Lyrically, "Orange Trees" uses vivid imagery" with the wikilink
 * "to the beauty of Earth’s" → "to the beauty of Earth's"
 * "the island of Lefkada in Greece," → "the city island of Lefkada in Greece,"
 * "she said: "[...] it's" → "she said "it's"
 * "It’s like my body/biology" → "It's like my body/biology"
 * "them to the ones from" → "them to the ones of"
 * "Marina opens the song..." this sentence does not have a ref to back it up
 * "into the first verse where she describes" → "into the first verse, where she describes:"
 * Target bridge to Bridge (music)
 * "she sings "Life is beautiful" → "Marina sings, "Life is beautiful"
 * All ✅. Carbrera (talk) 16:50, 20 July 2020 (UTC).

Critical reception

 * "Murphy also liked the track," → "Lauren Murphy also praised the track,"
 * "on the album she felt were" → "on the album that she felt were"
 * Wikilink upbeat to itself
 * ""It’s achingly lovely and" → ""It's achingly lovely and"
 * "was reviewed by several critics and received praise." either add more reviews or remove the "and received praise" claim
 * "and called it the EP's sole highlight." → "and called it the sole highlight."
 * "The more negative reviews of the song" → "The more negative reviews of "Orange Trees"" to be specific
 * "of the song and said that it" → "of the song, saying that it"
 * Wikilink Fanta to itself
 * Target San Pellegrino to S.Pellegrino
 * "but there’s something" → "but there's something"
 * "In her review of the parent album," → "In her review of Love + Fear,"
 * All ✅. Carbrera (talk) 17:09, 20 July 2020 (UTC).

Music videos

 * Wikilink music video to itself
 * "with Marina for the video for" → "with Marina on the video for"
 * "It was filmed on" → "The visual was filmed on"
 * Remove wikilink on Mexico
 * "As indicated, it was uploaded to Marina's official" → "Ultimately, it was uploaded to Marina's"
 * "The video opens following..." and the following sentences up to "Many of the shots..." do not seem to be backed up by any refs
 * "on the beach as they" → "on the beach, as they"
 * "in the sand in a one-piece swimsuit" → "in the sand of the beach in a one-piece swimsuit,"
 * Remove target on dock
 * "the release of the music video, the paid download was available for purchase" → "the YouTube release of the music video, it was made available for download"
 * "A contributor to" → "A contributor for"
 * "vertical video also directed by Muller was" → "vertical video, also directed by Muller, was"
 * "The video was eventually posted on Marina's" → "The video was eventually uploaded to her"
 * All ✅. Carbrera (talk) 02:13, 21 July 2020 (UTC).

Live performances

 * "of the set list of her" → "of the set list for her" on the img main text
 * "becoming her first appearance" → "standing as her first appearance"
 * "review of her performance," → "review of the performance,"
 * "who reviewed Marina's show in" → "reviewing Marina's show in"
 * "to a near vibrato" which" → "to a near vibrato", which"
 * All ✅. Carbrera (talk) 12:34, 15 July 2020 (UTC).

Track listings and formats

 * Retitle to Track listings
 * Use bullet points on each track listing header
 * Remove wikilink on Spotify since that is part of the release's title
 * Wikilink to Claptone should be on the track name instead of the release's title
 * All ✅. Carbrera (talk) 12:34, 15 July 2020 (UTC).

Credits and personnel

 * Any specific order here; like is this how it is ordered in the liner notes, or some other reasoning maybe for all I know?
 * I arranged them alphabetically by last name. Carbrera (talk) 16:57, 20 July 2020 (UTC).

Release history

 * Format → Format(s)
 * Distributor → Label
 * Separate Digital download and streaming by using hlist instead, with the targets on first mentions solely
 * Add a separate col for the versions and call the first two releases Original; the other ones should have their remix titles added as you would've figured
 * Wikilink Spotify to itself
 * Wikilink Claptone to himself
 * Center all of the refs
 * All ✅. Carbrera (talk) 16:55, 20 July 2020 (UTC).

Final comments and verdict

 * after we are reunited with a review of this from me, good luck in the response! --Kyle Peake (talk) 10:35, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
 * – thanks for your patience. I completely blanked about finishing up this GAN but I will be able to wrap it within the next two days if that is alright with you. Let me know and thanks, Carbrera (talk) 00:16, 20 July 2020 (UTC).
 * Yeah it is fine, leave comments for anything that I have asked questions about or you have questions about please. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:53, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
 * – Hello. I believe I have completed addressing all of your comments. Thanks again for picking up another article. I appreciate it. Let me know if there is anything else I can do. Carbrera (talk) 14:51, 21 July 2020 (UTC).
 * Nice one man, I'll have a look through tonight and see if this is ready to be passed or still needs some fixes! --Kyle Peake (talk) 15:25, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Have done some copy editing but you still need to cite various stores for releases as suggested, plus are you sure ref 11 works? --Kyle Peake (talk) 18:59, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * – What about now? I guess I overlooked those citations. And for #11, what is your opinion? I can't find any other source proving the existence of this digital EP other than directly from Spotify. Carbrera (talk) 21:24, 22 July 2020 (UTC).
 * #11 should work fine I guess, #9 still needs more though. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:11, 23 July 2020 (UTC)
 * – I changed 'Various' to just 'United States'. Carbrera (talk) 01:11, 24 July 2020 (UTC).
 * That's fine, did some brief copy editing but will now ✅, congrats on the well-timed response too. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:52, 24 July 2020 (UTC)