Talk:Orion-class battleship/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 14:55, 16 March 2017 (UTC)

Comments

 * No dab links, no dead links ❌, no copyvio.
 * I would suggest removing the (RN) from "built for the Royal Navy (RN)", and then change the rest of the RNs to Royal Navy.
 * I don't think so.
 * "The Orions were deemed obsolete by the end of the war in 1918 and" Suggest changing to: "The Orions were deemed obsolete by the end of the war, in 1918, and"
 * The year's not really a subordinate clause there.
 * "A third dreadnought was added to the programme about April 1909" suggest changing about to around.
 * OK.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:33, 16 March 2017 (UTC)
 * "On her way to the scrapyard, she ran aground, but was refloated and scrapped the following year." Is it known where she ran aground?
 * Added to the main body.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:29, 17 March 2017 (UTC)
 * The supplement and Navy List links are dead.
 * They all check out fine for me using the check external links in the toolbox.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:29, 17 March 2017 (UTC)
 * When I try and open them from the article it gives me "ia700709.us.archive.org’s server DNS address could not be found." -- Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  19:38, 17 March 2017 (UTC)
 * They changed the links on me, but everything's updated.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:45, 17 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Passing now. -- Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  23:22, 17 March 2017 (UTC)