Talk:Osa Maliki/GA1

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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 10:12, 2 January 2022 (UTC) Nominator The man from Gianyar (talk · contribs) at 14:28, 12 December 2021 (UTC)

General

 * Following terms are wiki-linked multiple times in the article. Suggesting to import this script. They should be linked only twice——once in the lead section, and once in the prose:
 * In the lead:
 * West Java
 * People's Representative Counci
 * President
 * Sukarno
 * fall from power
 * In the prose:
 * Taman Siswa
 * Indonesian Communist Party
 * Bandung
 * Sukarno
 * proclamation of independence
 * National Revolution
 * West Java
 * mass communication
 * Central Java
 * Hardi
 * Suharto
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 14:58, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

Detailed

 * President Sukarno's fall from power — avoid linking two or more adjacent words
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 16:32, 19 January 2022 (UTC)


 * During the Japanese occupation (both in the lead and the "Early life" section) — specify "Japanese occupation of of the Dutch East Indies"
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 16:32, 19 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Italicize Kenpeitai
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:01, 2 January 2022 (UTC)


 * In an independent Indonesia, he remained active in politics — should be "In an independent Indonesia, he remained an active politician"
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 16:32, 19 January 2022 (UTC)


 * President Sukarno's Guided Democracy — WP:SOB
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 13:34, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * The "Early life" section should be split in "Early life" and "Early career".
 * – The early life section is a bit too short to be split up, imo. I've changed the section's heading to Early life and career to compensate. Cheers, The man from Gianyar (talk) 03:17, 20 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Little is known of his early life, but he was educated in a — should be "Little is known of his early life; he was educated in a"
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 03:17, 20 January 2022 (UTC)


 * The article writes it as "Indonesian Communist Party", but our wiki-article states the common/formal name to be "Communist Party of Indonesia".
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 13:34, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * in the failed — "in the unsuccessful"
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 03:17, 20 January 2022 (UTC)


 * In the aftermath, Osa was — "Subsequently, Osa was"
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 13:34, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * and sentenced to jail — would "imprisoned" work?
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 13:34, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * During his time in Boven-Digoel, Osa spent his free time — repetition of "time"
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 02:43, 30 January 2022 (UTC)


 * earning a salary of 17,5 Gulden — the comma should be decimal. And suggesting to use Template:inflation.
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 02:43, 30 January 2022 (UTC)


 * BPI — is never again used in the article. Do we need to define the abbreviation?
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:01, 2 January 2022 (UTC)


 * he studied mass communication abroad — in which country? do the sources discuss this?
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 02:43, 30 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Following the proclamation of independence and the beginning of the Indonesian National Revolution, he served in the newly formed provincial government of the province of West Java. — this is repeated information. Already mentioned in the immediately previous section
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 02:51, 30 January 2022 (UTC)


 * and later the Indonesian National Party (PNI), after the Kediri Congress in 1946. — "and after the Kediri Congress in 1946, he joined the Indonesian National Party (PNI)."
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 02:51, 30 January 2022 (UTC)


 * he studied mass communication abroad. — Repeated information.
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:56, 20 January 2022 (UTC)


 * between 28 August and 1 September 1963 — 'between' or 'from'?
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:56, 20 January 2022 (UTC)


 * President Sukarno gave a speech. In the speech, Sukarno chided party — "President Sukarno gave a speech; he chided party"
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:56, 20 January 2022 (UTC)


 * 6 members — "six members"
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:56, 20 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Suharto then arranged — "Subsequently, Suharto arranged"
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:56, 20 January 2022 (UTC)


 * In the third meeting, which took place on 24 March — " In the third meeting, which took place on 24 March"
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:37, 20 January 2022 (UTC)


 * "reforming" itself. — can remove the quotes
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:37, 20 January 2022 (UTC)


 * a Heart attack — lowercase
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:37, 20 January 2022 (UTC)


 * on 3:00 p. m. — Add a non-breaking-space (Template:nbsp) between '3:00' and 'p.m.'. Also, no space between 'p.' and 'm.'
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 02:51, 30 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Cikutra Heroes Cemetery, Bandung — replace the comma with 'in'.
 * ✅ – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:37, 20 January 2022 (UTC)

Images

 * Images can take ALT text.
 * ✅ – Sorry for the late reply, but finished adding the alt text. Cheers, The man from Gianyar (talk) 09:51, 24 February 2022 (UTC)


 * Images need PD US tags as well. For example, File:Ali Sastroamidjojo Nasional 28 Jul 1960 p3.jpg has both the tags.
 * ✅ – Didn't realize I haven't added the ✅ on this one. The man from Gianyar (talk) 09:50, 30 March 2022 (UTC)