Talk:Otis Redding/Archive 2

open-throated singing
open-throated singing was piped to Overtone singing thusly: open-throated singing. If you read the Overtone singing, you will see it doesn't dwell on R&B singers but rather ethnic Mongolian singers and such. I did find a citation that Blind Willie Johnson, although not a true overtone singer, had some of the same elements so I added it to the article. However the citation was to the National Geographic I don't think the Encyclopedia Britannica article is exactly an expert source on Otis Redding. Can't you find another? Here's a link that describes "Singing With An ‘Open Throat’: Vocal Tract Shaping" MathewTownsend (talk) 22:00, 20 February 2012 (UTC)
 * I pipe-linked because in the overtone singing article there was standing in the lead, in boldface, that this style of singing is also called "open-throated singing". I couldn't find any other source mentioning an open-throat singing on Redding. It is very hard to find sources about his singing style overall, even though he was one of the greatest singers ever.-- ♫GoP♫ T C N 17:41, 21 February 2012 (UTC)

questions
The article says twice that he was a "talent scout". The Encyclopedia Britannica reference in the lede doesn't mention the "talent scout". Who did he discover?
 * ? The Buckley ref definitely states he was a talent scout.-- GoP T C N 11:34, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
 * Then why use the Encyclopedia Britannica to source that statement in the lede? Who did he discover as a talent scout? (There's no elaboration of the "talent scout" aspect in the article although it's in the lede sentence.) Everything in the lede should be expanded upon in the article. If it's important enough to be in the lede sentence, it must be really important. MathewTownsend (talk) 20:32, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
 * What do you mean? The Britannica source is next to the "open-throated singing" claim. The text already explains that he served as a talent scout and it is not absolutely necessary to mention it in the text if there is not much information about it.-- GoP T C N 10:06, 2 April 2012 (UTC)

The article says, "At the age of 19, Redding met 15-year-old Zelma Atwood at "The Teenage Party". She gave birth to Redding's son, Dexter, in the summer of 1960 and married Redding in August 1961.[15] In mid-1960, he moved to Los Angeles with his sister, Deborah, and wrote his first songs including "She's Allright", "Tuff Enuff", "I'm Gettin' Hip" and "Gamma Lamma", the first later released as a single." What happened to his wife and child? As far as I can tell, they're not mentioned again. MathewTownsend (talk) 23:22, 31 March 2012 (UTC)
 * His wife and daughter lived in a conventional American society.-- GoP T C N 11:34, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
 * "His wife and daughter lived in a conventional American society." What does this mean? Is there a reference for this? Did he still have contact with them? Though he was extremely wealthy when he died (according to the article), did his son and wife get any? Did he have relationships with other women? (Did he have a personal life - other than the rather odd stuff about his personality mentioned in the article?) MathewTownsend (talk) 20:32, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
 * It means that this family was a classic example of a conventional, every-day-life American family. I, of course, can describe what she did her whole life, such as cooking, vacuuming, make the bed, washing up, ... She was not an important person in the music business, and she was just a housemaid; she had no impact on Redding. No, Redding had no other affairs. As stated below, he was a family man and would never leave her for other women. Well maybe they get money, but since his wife was married to him, she might have given a share of money to her children. -- GoP T C N 10:06, 2 April 2012 (UTC)

Otis! The Otis Redding Story
Just to point out that this much mentioned book was named "unreliable" and its information "is nothing short of lies spun to sell a poorly researched book" by Zelma and Phil Walden, see here (only visible for HighBeam user. Regards.-- GoP T <sup style="color:#8EE5EE;">C <sub style="color:#8EE5EE;">N 17:20, 6 May 2012 (UTC)

Copyedit
While listening to his amazing recordings, I hit this again per the Guild's request page. Comments:


 * The article had many details about associates (e.g., listing the travel arrangements of musicians who weren't on the plane) that weren't relevant to Redding, per se. I removed many of these asides.


 * It would, however, be relevant to list the people who were on the plane and died with him.
 * Added--Tomcat (7) 13:02, 3 January 2013 (UTC)


 * I patched some vague and illogical parts that seemed and probably still are incorrect. I'd appreciate a careful review by an expert.
 * Could you name examples?--Tomcat (7) 13:02, 3 January 2013 (UTC)
 * I struggled with describing the funeral, because the date narrative didn't make sense. Also, did he play WITH Gladdy or just at the same place? Also, when he first visited London, I wasn't sure if that was the first time Stax booked gigs at all or just for these artists or just in Europe. I guessed. Lfstevens (talk) 19:52, 3 January 2013 (UTC)
 * To the second point, one source states that Redding "soon began working with various Gladys Williams bands" (Geoff Brown: Try a Little Tenderness, p.11) but nowhere did I read that he played with her. I clarified that in the text. To the third point, I clarified that those were the first "real" concerts in various cities (the source states that there were a few small gigs).--Tomcat (7) 11:24, 4 January 2013 (UTC)
 * I also clarified the rap thing.--Tomcat (7) 11:24, 4 January 2013 (UTC)
 * I am not sure about the funeral description. For me it makes sense.--Tomcat (7) 11:24, 4 January 2013 (UTC)


 * I don't know the story of his recordings with Aretha, but it would be great to add that.
 * He has not recorded with Franklin.--Tomcat (7) 13:02, 3 January 2013 (UTC)
 * ??? [ http://www.amazon.com/Aretha-Otis-Franklin/dp/B00005NQFL ]
 * This is just a compilation of Redding and Franklin songs. They never performed together.--Tomcat (7) 11:24, 4 January 2013 (UTC)


 * His wife and child are mentioned only once. It would be great to add a bit more about them.
 * Could not find anything. See also previous discussions.--Tomcat (7) 13:02, 3 January 2013 (UTC)

Good luck with FA. Cheers!
 * Thanks for the copyedits. However, I think the sentence about his free improvisation at the end is notable. Not sure why you removed it. Regards.--Tomcat (7) 13:02, 3 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Didn't make sense to me. Clarify? Lfstevens (talk) 19:39, 3 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Nevermind. Does not seem to be very special. Many soul musicians improvised at the end.--Tomcat (7) 11:24, 4 January 2013 (UTC)


 * There's some good stuff in here for the article: WSJ piece Lfstevens (talk) 19:36, 5 January 2013 (UTC)
 * While it has good information, I don't think it is particularly notable for that article. It may be used for expanding (Sittin' On) The Dock of the Bay. Regards.--Tomcat (7) 11:30, 26 February 2013 (UTC)

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Round 3


 * Why talk about Wayne Cochran?


 * This doesn't make sense: "Around 1965, Redding co-wrote "I've Been Loving You Too Long" withthe Impressions lead singer Jerry Butler. That summer, Redding and the studio crew arranged new songs for his next album. Ten of the eleven songs were written over 24 hours during July 9–10 in Memphis. Two songs, "Ole Man Trouble" and "Respect", had been finished earlier." It reads as though 3 of the 11 had been written and/or recorded earlier.
 * It means that Respect and Ole Man Trouble were finished earlier in that 24 hours session. I've Been Loving You was written outside of that session. Regards.--Tomcat (7) 11:27, 26 February 2013 (UTC)


 * Addressed comments, but can see that more work might be appropriate.


 * Lfstevens (talk) 02:06, 13 January 2013 (UTC)