Talk:Otis Redding/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: SilkTork (talk · contribs) 16:54, 29 September 2011 (UTC)

I'll take a look and start to leave some comments within the next few days. I am taking on board a batch of reviews, so it may be some time before I start to comment. I am also by nature a fairly slow and thorough reviewer who likes to check out sources, so this is unlikely to be quick. However, I am always willing to help out on the editing, and will make direct minor adjustments myself rather than list them. I always welcome discussion, and see the review process as entirely collaborative.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  16:54, 29 September 2011 (UTC)

Tick list
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Comments

 * File:Otis Redding.jpg doesn't have an appropriate source, I don't think that image is allowable. And I'm not sure if File:OtisReddingStatue.jpg is allowable - especially as there is no attribution for who created the statue. Please check at Media copyright questions.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  14:04, 3 October 2011 (UTC)


 * The statue is by Bradley Cooley, now attributed in the file. http://bronzebycooley.com/resume.html Bubba73 You talkin' to me? 15:22, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much :)! Is that ok now?-- ♫Greatorangepumpkin♫ Hey it's me 15:48, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
 * File:Otis Redding.jpg is sourced adequately (if not ideally), per WP:NFC, but File:RSObit.jpg appears to be sourced originally from this image from the Michael Ochs Archives, which may or may not be an issue. Gobonobo  T C 23:29, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks!-- ♫Greatorangepumpkin♫ Hey it's me 11:24, 4 October 2011 (UTC)
 * The link goes to a blog page which doesn't give appropriate source information. Is that sufficent? Would a photo from the offical website be more appropriate, especially as they give more details.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  10:04, 2 November 2011 (UTC)
 * I asked Gobonobo-- ♫GoP♫ T C N 17:10, 4 November 2011 (UTC)
 * I think it's good that we try to provide accurate and detailed source information for non-free files where possible. To my knowledge, neither the WP:NFCC nor the GA criteria prohibit us from using one non-free image when another exists that has better sourcing. I'll go ahead and email the journalist whose blog the image was sourced from as well as otisredding.com and see if they know about that image. I opted for the current image because I thought it was a good likeness of Redding and I liked that he was facing the article, drawing readers' eyes towards the text, but I'd be happy to defer to someone else's aesthetics. We could just go crazy and use the photo of Redding with a rifle. Cheers, Gobonobo  T C 04:34, 5 November 2011 (UTC)
 * I think you're right. WP:NFCC simply asks for the source, which I suppose means from where the image was uploaded, regardless of legal use. I had assumed that the source would be one that used the image legally, rather in the manner of a reliable source.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  11:31, 5 November 2011 (UTC)
 * I've asked a question at the policy talkpage.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  11:33, 5 November 2011 (UTC)
 * I followed up with the Atlanta journalist from whose blog the image was acquired. The photograph was used to illustrate an article on the "I’ve Got Dreams to Remember" exhibit at the Georgia Music Hall of Fame, which featured photographs and memorabilia from the Big O Ranch belonging to Zelma Redding. She indicated that Ellen Fleurov might know the exact origin of the photograph. I've yet to hear back from otisredding.com though. Gobonobo  T C 13:07, 8 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks for that. Under our existing guidelines the image can be used, though it would make sense to get as much information about the image as possible - or simply to replace it with an image that already has basic information such as photographer and date.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  13:13, 8 November 2011 (UTC)


 * The external links are not part of GA criteria, however, it's worth checking at WP:EL if all the links are appropriate.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  14:07, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Removed all but one.-- ♫Greatorangepumpkin♫ Hey it's me 15:48, 3 October 2011 (UTC)


 * What is going on with Otis Redding/version 1? That version contains all the history up to August 2011. It appears as though there was a sandbox version renamed to the mainspace version, and vice versa, so the sandbox version now contains all the history. I think a history merge will need to be done.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  14:19, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
 * The discussion took place on User_talk:Anthony_Appleyard. I guess an another histmerge is not possible.-- ♫Greatorangepumpkin♫ Hey it's me 15:48, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
 * History merges scare me, and I couldn't clearly follow what Anthony_Appleyard was saying; however, we have a situation in which the current article doesn't have the right history. Can you give me some background here. Why were the two histories swapped? If some work had been done in a sandbox, it could have been merged into the mainspace article in one edit with a link in the edit summary and/or on the talkpage; however, there is a suggestion that parallel editing took place after text was merged. My feeling is that the original history should be restored, and a link created to the sandbox version, which then needs all images and categories removed.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  00:29, 4 October 2011 (UTC)
 * I asked him.-- ♫Greatorangepumpkin♫ Hey it's me 11:24, 4 October 2011 (UTC)
 * About the history-merges, see User talk:Anthony Appleyard. Anthony Appleyard (talk) 13:05, 4 October 2011 (UTC)
 * I have merged the histories of the two articles together so there is a full history now. I took the history of the sandbox version which became the main version from the 20 August, which was the point of the merge (the history before that date was by one editor - GreatOrangePumpkin, and is contained entirely within the merge edit of the 20th August), and the history of the main version up to 20th August - the edits tie together and provide a complete history of all the contributors. The history of the alternative version from 20 August on consisted of minor maintenance edits unrelated to the main article. I have removed two of those using RevDelete - though that is not an appropriate use of RevDelete, so I haven't done any more. The few there are can remain within the main history with no harm. The merge I have done may not have been by the book, and it may not be perfect, but it does now provide a full and accessible contribution history of the article.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  15:42, 10 October 2011 (UTC)


 * Not part of the GA criteria, however, it's worth checking at WP:QUOTE and MOS:QUOTE regarding the use of quotations. The use of coloured boxes could be seen as non-standard and intrusive, and the amount of quotation seems excessive in relation to the size of the article. The quotes are not always related to the text. We have a quote from Redding regarding the influence of Little Richard, though there appears to be no mention of that in the text. Quotes are normally used to illustrate a point rather than as a substitute for making that point. Reprinting the sleeve notes of Otis Blue seems excessive and unnecessary since the information is already present in the article, and the sleeve notes are simply be repeating the same information. I've integrated one quote - - as an example of how it coule be done.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  14:51, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Will check, give me a little time.-- ♫Greatorangepumpkin♫ Hey it's me 15:48, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
 * I removed most of the quote boxes. As for the very first one, I think it is better to have it in that section, because it is too long if in-text. Also it is an important quote by Redding, as Richard was a big inspiration for him, and without him he would not probably be a musician.-- ♫Greatorangepumpkin♫ Hey <sup style="color:#DCDCDC;">it's me 16:34, 3 October 2011 (UTC)


 * Prose needs attention, there are a number of basic mistakes scattered around, and at times it is difficult to get at the meaning. Also, at times the text wanders off, such as when mentioning Redding's Monterey appearance - most of the first paragraph of that section is about the festival and other acts rather than Redding's performance. When I have a moment I will go through and brush up some of the errors, and folks at WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors may help - though it would be worth waiting until the end of the review so we can see how much work needs doing.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  15:01, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Requested on GOCE-- ♫Greatorangepumpkin♫ <sub style="color:#DCDCDC;">Hey <sup style="color:#DCDCDC;">it's me 16:34, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
 * User:Nikkimaria did the copy-edit :)-- ♫Greatorangepumpkin♫ <sub style="color:#DCDCDC;">Hey <sup style="color:#DCDCDC;">it's me 11:24, 4 October 2011 (UTC)
 * It does need a bit more more work. Sentences like "Although he was more popular among blacks early in his career, the opposite later became true", are not very clear. Which opposite became true? He was hated by blacks? I'm OK about making edits as I work though the article, though this will not be quick as my internet access is random and intermittent at the moment - it all depends on my young daughter!  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  16:19, 10 October 2011 (UTC)


 * The lead needs some attention per WP:Lead. This is quite common in a GAN. The lead should be an overview of the whole article.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  15:06, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
 * I added more text. What about now?-- ♫Greatorangepumpkin♫ <sub style="color:#DCDCDC;">Hey <sup style="color:#DCDCDC;">it's me 15:48, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
 * I've started to do some work on the lead - a bit crude at the moment, and there will be some duplication of material; I'll drill down a bit later and work on it. I should have some time tomorrow.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  16:19, 10 October 2011 (UTC)


 * I'll take a closer look at this tomorrow. Sorry for being a bit slow so far. I'll be able to give some concrete advice tomorrow, and point out where the article fails and where it passes, and what needs to be done.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  16:22, 10 October 2011 (UTC)

Hold
Otis Redding is a high profile subject, attracting over 100,000 readers a month, and is a major topic. It is important that we deal appropriately with such subjects, and that we make them good articles, and when we do list them as Good Articles, that readers can feel confident that the article is well researched and sufficiently broad enough in coverage to give them a reasonable understanding of the topic. There is good information here, and it is organised in sections, and there are sources supporting the statements. The article presents as reasonably tidy and attractive. There is much to like here, and much that is useful. There is still work to be done however. The lead needs a bit more attention so that it does become an authoritative and well rounded overview of the subject. The prose needs a bit of attention to sharpen it up. There needs also to be an appropriate amount of information, and for the information to be presented in a balanced and proportionate manner. I think that the legacy section may be over-detailed. And while there is a section on Redding's singing, there is not a similar one on his song-writing. A significant song such as "Respect" is mentioned in only one sentence, and that makes it appear as though it were written by Sam Cooke. I don't know much about his work as a record producer, though it is mentioned in the first sentence, but not again in the article as far as I can see. The significant album Otis Blue is not discussed, simply mentioned in the Discography. My feeling at this stage is that the article is not quite at the tidying up for GA listing stage, but probably still needs a bit of work to do. That is not to say that the article cannot be made to meet the GA criteria within a reasonable space of time, but that it will require some work. I am willing to help out, though that help will be patchy. I'll put this on hold for 14 days for the following areas to be worked on:
 * Research coverage to ensure article contains important elements in Redding's life and career to meet 3(a) "addresses the main aspects of the topic"
 * Balance out the Legacy section so that it contains information in proportion to the rest of the article per criteria 3(b) "stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail"
 * Work on lead so that it summarises main points of the article, doesn't mention anything that is not later developed in the main body, and gives an adequate overview of the subject, per critera 1(b) "omplies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections"
 * Copy edit the article to comply with criteria 1(a) "the prose is clear and concise".

As long as progress is being made I am willing to keep the review open and support work towards improving the article, though I don't anticipate the review being extended beyond October if the progress is slow and difficult. I should hope a decision would be made one way or the other by then.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  16:09, 11 October 2011 (UTC)


 * I don't have the books "Soulsville U.S.A.: The Story of Stax Records", "Otis!: The Otis Redding Story" and "Otis Redding: Try a Little Tenderness", but I will try to borrow it from somewhere (or buy it, if there is no alternative).
 * I borrowed the book "Sweet Soul Music". A really great book with a lot of useful information. I will start tomorrow.-- ♫GoP♫ <sub style="color:red;">T <sup style="color:red;">C <sub style="color:red;">N 19:17, 18 October 2011 (UTC)
 * ✅ That book received many awards and was praised by several newspapers, journals, etc. Nearly every book cite this book as a source. This book contains so much information, but I searched the most important things. I added some text about his relations with Stax, his early life, things about his recordings and the aftermath of his dead.-- ♫GoP♫ <sub style="color:red;">T <sup style="color:red;">C <sub style="color:red;">N 14:46, 20 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Split that section and moved some text to a subsection. ✅
 * Moved some to sections below; removed unnecessary references ✅ Your inclusion is very nice; can we keep it?
 * Requested ✅ User:Soerfm among others performed copyedits.-- ♫GoP♫ <sub style="color:red;">T <sup style="color:red;">C <sub style="color:red;">N 11:19, 19 October 2011 (UTC)


 * I'm away this weekend in Eastbourne taking part in the Beachy Head Marathon, I'll take another look at this when I get back.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  17:40, 20 October 2011 (UTC)


 * I see that work has been done and is ongoing. Well done for that. I'm just wrapping up Talk:Courtney Love/GA1 - editing there hasn't progressed as much as it could, so I'm getting directly involved to see if the article can be tidied up enough to list it as a GA. I'm going to make a decision one way or the other on that in the next couple of days, and then pay attention to the three remaining GANs on my list. I've taken a quick look at this article, and there may be some more copy-editing to do. I'll either do it myself in a couple of days, or mention it here so people know what needs to be done.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  17:40, 31 October 2011 (UTC)
 * User:Lfstevens, User:Trekphiler, User:Curly Turkey, User:Soerfm among others performed copyedits. The prose should be now adequate.-- ♫GoP♫ <sub style="color:red;">T <sup style="color:red;">C <sub style="color:red;">N 17:14, 4 November 2011 (UTC)

Refresh
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Comments
To make it easier to see what still needs doing, and to see if I can pass the article as it stands now, I'm wiping the blackboard and starting afresh.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  18:29, 7 November 2011 (UTC)


 * Pass
 * Images. There are two non-free images used in the article. The lead image is sourced to a blog and contains no identifiable information - no date, no copyright holder, no photographer. There are other non-free images of Redding which have adequate information, and which could be used, and this has been pointed out. Even though the information on this image is inadequate and the image could be replaced, it has been checked and does not infringe GA criteria, so that is passed. I would urge that the image is replaced with a better sourced, and more informative image as soon as possible.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  18:37, 7 November 2011 (UTC)


 * Stable. There are no edit wars.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  18:38, 7 November 2011 (UTC)


 * Neutral. Article is soberly written with no evidence of bias.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  18:49, 7 November 2011 (UTC)


 * Reference section There is a reference section which meets GA criteria. It uses the less common shortened cites, which is acceptable. I do note, however, that the citation style was changed quite recently by an IP account. This is generally frowned upon per WP:CITEVAR. If there is an acceptable citation style being used it is generally not acceptable to change that style, particularly when changing from the widely used fuller style which is generally seen as the most useful, to the less popular and less useful shortened variety. If main contributors wish to change back to the fuller citation method - which is easier for editors to insert (most editors understand the fuller method, and most citation tools use the fuller sort) and easier for readers to check (it's one click to the full details rather than a double click with publication information separated from page numbers), then they should do so as soon as possible. I would support a move back to fuller citation and would be prepared to do the work if that is the consensus.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  19:09, 7 November 2011 (UTC)


 * Original research. There's no evidence of original material in the article.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  13:38, 8 November 2011 (UTC)


 * Reliably sourced. Statements check out with reliable sources, and all quotes and opinions appear to be sourced.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  13:43, 8 November 2011 (UTC)


 * Focus. Concerns about focus have been addressed.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  13:58, 8 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Reading through again, I see there is excessive detail on Monterey unrelated to Redding.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  12:59, 14 November 2011 (UTC)
 * I see you did it. There are now references errors, though.-- ♫GoP♫ <sub style="color:red;">T <sup style="color:red;">C <sub style="color:red;">N 22:51, 14 November 2011 (UTC)


 * Fail
 * MoS. The relevant aspects of MoS are met, apart from WP:Lead. The lead needs to be an overview of the whole article. As a rough guide, each major section in the article should be summarised in the lead. And there should be nothing mentioned in the lead that is not mentioned in the article. There are various points about the lead that have been mentioned in this GAN that have not been dealt with. For example, it is mentioned in the lead that he known as a record producer - but this is not mentioned in the article. His work as a song-writer is not fully explored, even though he was inducted into the Songwriters Hall of Fame in 1994, and one of his major songs, Respect, is presented in the article in a way that could suggest it was written by Sam Cooke: "Redding and his backing band The Bar-Kays opened with Cooke's "Shake" and then covered "Respect"." Some of this commentary will also apply to broad coverage, which is also a fail.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  14:30, 8 November 2011 (UTC)
 * I removed "record producer" completely. I explained that it was written by Redding.


 * Broad coverage. Nothing on his record producing. Not enough on his writing. And while his influence as a cross-over artist is hinted at in the lead, this is not developed. His singing style is dealt with in the Legacy section, and a decision could be made to deal with his song-writing and producing in that section, along with his importance as a cross-over artist. Or these things could be dealt with in distinct sections - Music (Singing, Writing, Producing) and Influence (Soul music, Cross-over artist), with or without a Legacy section. There are a number of ways of doing it.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  14:30, 8 November 2011 (UTC)
 * I removed "record producer" completely, as there is nothing much to say. I added a paragraph about his songwriting.


 * Prose. Prose has been an issue from the start, and though there have been attempts to copy-edit the article, it still retains basic errors:, and unclear phrasing: "Together with guitarist Johnny Jenkins he formed the band "Pinetoppers". Initially unsuccessful, they broke out at the music contest "Teenage Party"; with their help Redding won 15 times in a row and it became his first successful gig."  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  14:30, 8 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Can you say what is wrong with "Together with guitarist Johnny Jenkins he formed the band "Pinetoppers". Initially unsuccessful, they broke out at the music contest "Teenage Party"; with their help Redding won 15 times in a row and it became his first successful gig."? -- ♫GoP♫ <sub style="color:red;">T <sup style="color:red;">C <sub style="color:red;">N 15:59, 8 November 2011 (UTC)
 * It doesn't make sense. And it doesn't help reading the main article, because the information there is slightly different - the main body says he performed with the Upsetters at the Teenage Party, and won the competition with the help of Jenkins. I think it is possible to piece together the gaps. I'll check sources to see if what I think is meant is what sources say, and I will have a go at tidying it up.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  16:27, 8 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Sweet Soul Music says that Redding says he won a local talent show run by Gladys Williams 15 times in a row until they wouldn't let him play any more. After that he went on to do The Teenage Party where he met his wife and Jenkins, and he was successful at The Teenage Party. Pinetoppers was Jenkin's group that Redding joined. No indication that the Pinetoppers did talent shows.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  16:59, 8 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks, it seems like I mixed up the contests, etc. I rewrote the early life. Now it must be correct.-- ♫GoP♫ <sub style="color:red;">T <sup style="color:red;">C <sub style="color:red;">N 10:54, 9 November 2011 (UTC)

Is English your first language? I ask because sometimes the text you add contains basic errors. "On Sunday she hosted talent shows", "winning on a 5$ contest fifteen times in a row", and "but it did not last long until he seperated from the group" might all be typos, but given the amount of them in just a few edits, and the general level of prose in the article, it gives me pause for thought. There are strategies we can explore if English is not your first language, such as using online grammar check services. It's also worth checking when you create a wikilink, that the link is spelt correctly and/or goes to the right article - look at Heebie Jeebies and Roxy Theatre.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  15:12, 9 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Reworded. Any more examples?-- ♫GoP♫ <sub style="color:red;">T <sup style="color:red;">C <sub style="color:red;">N 13:50, 12 November 2011 (UTC)

Fail or hold?
This GAN has gone on for over a month, and it is the same things that have been mentioned right from the start that are preventing this article from being listed. The prose, the lead and the coverage. I don't think, however, that we are far from that listing, and though I know that GreatOrangePumpkin is keen for this GAN to be decided one way or the other, I think it might be worth holding out for one more week to see if the work can be done. I can't promise I'll find the time to help out as it seems that whenever I get onto Wikipedia there is somebody who wants me to do something and I am way behind on schedule for various things, but I think it's worth seeing if it's possible to do the work in seven days, and if not then close it down. A GAN that is so close is a decent motivator, while a failed GAN can be a bit of a downer.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  14:41, 8 November 2011 (UTC)


 * I'm off to France now for the Nice-Cannes Marathon. I'll have limited internet access. I'll take a look at this once more when I get back at the end of the month. I note at the moment that the prose, the lead and the coverage are still not meeting GA criteria. If that is still the case at the end of the month I will close this as not-listed.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  18:57, 15 November 2011 (UTC)
 * This is brilliant; maybe, when you return, you will make edits here and then, then comment a little bit and say you will run from Casablanca to Cape of Good Hope. Excellent.-- ♫GoP♫ <sub style="color:red;">T <sup style="color:red;">C <sub style="color:red;">N 19:46, 15 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Snarky and uncalled for. Binksternet (talk) 23:02, 15 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Yes, but these things happen, no worries. I'd like to see this article listed, but each time I look I see more problems, and while some areas get improved, others seem to get worse. Sometimes, even with the best of intentions, an article doesn't get improved as much as people would like. This one needs a decent copy-edit. I think people have picked at it, same as I've picked at it, but nobody has really sat down with it for the several hours I think it actually needs. And on top of the copy-edit, I think it needs someone to do a decent bit of background research to ensure the article is appropriately detailed and gives the right coverage to Redding's life and career. I have held this out longer than I should, given the inadequate progress, but I keep hoping that either the work will be done, or that I will find the time to do it myself.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  23:55, 15 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Well, that's your opinion. I fully disagree with your position. -- ♫GoP♫ <sub style="color:red;">T <sup style="color:red;">C <sub style="color:red;">N 11:28, 16 November 2011 (UTC)


 * There are some mistakes I was able to find quickly which means that there may be further mistakes:
 * Incorrect quote of Bill Graham saying "biggest gig" (wrong) rather than "best gig".
 * Nothing serious; done
 * There's a glaring mistake about the supposed wrong ending that Redding's band made on his final song at Monterey Pop. The source, Ian Inglis, says, "The false ending... was a dramatic device". Look up false ending. It does not mean wrong.
 * Removed
 * Why is there no mention of San Francisco (the city), San Francisco Bay or Sausalito?
 * Unfortunately I don't own the book anymore. I added that it was written in a houseboat while resting there, though I think it is not important as we are talking about Redding's biography, aren't we?
 * Why is there no mention of how Redding influenced Janis Joplin?
 * There was, but I removed it. Are we talking about Joplin or Redding?
 * Why no reference to Geoff Brown's book Otis Redding: Try a Little Tenderness, or to Zelda Redding's The Definitive Otis Redding?
 * Because I don't have the books and don't want to borrow or but them, as mentioned above.
 * I think this GAN should be failed and the article submitted to Peer review. Binksternet (talk) 23:02, 15 November 2011 (UTC)
 * I think you're right, but I have said I will hold it open until the end of the month, and that's what I will do, unless GreatOrangePumpkin requests I close it in the next couple of hours. If GreatOrangePumpkin requests a close, and I don't respond, then someone else can close it as not listed.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  23:55, 15 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Yes, of course. It was already peer reviewed, why should I do it the second time?


 * Details about "Dock of the Bay": This section is clumsily written and it does not have the right details. Cropper said that he and Redding were playing six nights at Basin Street West in the North Beach district of San Francisco in August 1967 when some women found out where their hotel room was. They moved to more remote housing, renting a houseboat in Sausalito where Redding played Sgt. Pepper by the Beatles. On the houseboat the two men worked out the beginnings of "Dock". It was after all this that he had surgery for polyps. Source: Page 146 of San Francisco, the musical history tour by Joel Selvin. Binksternet (talk) 01:30, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * It does have the right details. "The two men" - If you mean Cropper and Redding, Cropper wasn't in this houseboat. It was one of his friends, I believe his name was Sloane, but this is not important. I could include the whole recording, documented by a journalist, but it is copyrighted.
 * Aha! The guy was Earl "Speedo" Sims, not Cropper, according to Joel Selvin in the linked book. Thanks for questioning that! My mistake... Binksternet (talk) 13:00, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Bill Graham presents: my life inside rock and out, beginning on page 173, casts Redding's stage performances as a sexual experience for white audiences in San Francisco. Nothing in the article suggests that Redding was an electrifying performer who broke through color lines. Binksternet (talk) 01:30, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your review. At least well-conceived (very nitpicky, though).-- ♫GoP♫ <sub style="color:red;">T <sup style="color:red;">C <sub style="color:red;">N 11:28, 16 November 2011 (UTC)

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