Talk:Oubliette (The X-Files)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 11:46, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

Lead Plot
 * "apparently the woman experiences exactly what the child is feeling.", I'm not sure about the use of 'apparently' here, perhaps you could rephrase it or just find a synonym (seemingly, at a glance, etc)
 * Rephrased. Glimmer721  talk  16:06, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
 * No spaces should be present if the em dash is being used. Should be "Lucy's work clothes—O+ and B+," otherwise use the en dash.
 * Fixed. Glimmer721  talk  16:06, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
 * "Wade, the photographer's assistant, had been fired the day of the shoot", missing a 'who' inbetween 'assistant' and 'had'?
 * Not sure about this one; basically, it is saying that "Wade had been fired the day of the shoot" as the important part of the sentence, because now he is their main suspect. So the "had been fired the day of the shoot" is part of the sentence, rather than a subordinate add-on. Glimmer721  talk  16:06, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

Production Broadcast and reception
 * "The network requested that she be fifteen or sixteen and the episode would not rest on Amy's ordeal.", could do with a ref
 * It's after the following sentence. I think it's split between pages 120 and 121...the scans User:Gen. Quon sent me of the book have expired. I could ask him to check if you need it. Glimmer721  talk  16:06, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
 * It's on page 121, just checked.--Gen. Quon (talk) 17:15, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
 * which made it "nevertheless one of the series' boldest and greatest achievements". needs a ref as it is a direct quote.
 * Added. Glimmer721  talk  16:06, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

No concerns about imaging and sources. On hold. Lemonade51 (talk) 11:46, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
 * I believe I have fixed everything. Asking Gen. Quon about the page. Glimmer721  talk  16:06, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
 * And I just addressed the page issue. Should be good to!--Gen. Quon (talk) 17:16, 18 June 2012 (UTC)