Talk:PSLV-C37/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kees08 (talk · contribs) 05:13, 30 March 2017 (UTC)

Discussion
Why don't you hit up the things above, and I will take another round at it after? I saw you had started it, just ping me when you are done. A couple back and forth sessions like that and we should be good to go. Kees08 (talk) 04:55, 6 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review and apologies for the delay. I'm waiting for the Copyediting Guild to respond to the request. I'll be sure to ping you once the above concerns are addressed, and copy editing done. &mdash;  MB laze Lightning T 07:05, 6 April 2017 (UTC)
 * It is all good, looks like yours is almost up. Let me know when it is done and we can hit this up after. Kees08 (talk) 00:29, 7 April 2017 (UTC)

@: Please take a look and see if everything's resolved. &mdash;  MB laze Lightning T 15:51, 8 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Sorry for the delays, just been a bit busy in real life. Address what I have above for the second round of comments and I will hit it with a third round after that. I am still deciding what to do with the payload and other parameters section, I will let you know when I get that figured out.  Kees08 (Talk)  23:46, 15 April 2017 (UTC)
 * All done! &mdash;  MB laze Lightning T 12:54, 19 April 2017 (UTC)

Resolved
Going to dump the things from the table down here that are resolved to declutter it.

Reword this: It carried a total of 104 satellites including the 714 kilograms (1,574 lb) primary payload Cartosat-2D.[2][8][9] The launcher started placing the satellites into a polar Sun-synchronous orbit one after the other after a flight of 16 minutes and 48 seconds. ✅

Rephrase this: The total cost of the mission was US$15 million for the 1378 kg payloads.

The future tense of the verbs in the Usage section should be changed. ✅

ISRO can't say anything, its an organization not a person ;). Recommend changing it to something like 'ISRO released a statement that...' : ISRO said that it would ✅
 * Didn't change? ✅

Comma after the word originally: Originally PSLV-C37 was set to launch on 27 January 2017 with 83 satellites. ✅

Fix the grammar on this: With addition of twenty more satellites to the payload, the schedule was changed to 15 February 2017. ✅

International should not be capitalized here: and the International customers. ✅

Change to an Earth: a Earth imaging private ✅

The sentence before this ends abruptly, not sure what was supposed to happen with it: weighing around 5 kilograms (11 lb) each separated from the rocket in different directions to avoid collision. ✅

Do they or do they not require renewal? That insinuates to me that it is possible for them to be refueled, is that the case? - These satellites have a lifespan of about two to three years and would require regular renewal.

Add in author names when you can, like in the second citation and in the HuffPo citation. The HuffPo article also came from Space.com, I would prefer the link to come from there, but you need to add space.com to the citation either way. ✅

Fix dead link if you can, it is not required though. ✅

Dove satellites should not just link to the main Planet Labs article, either redlink Dove satellites or link it to an appropriate section. ✅

Is that see also necessary? Does not seem closely related.

Is there really not a single free image of this launch vehicle, the satellites, the launch, or anything like that? Is ISRO's copyright different than NASA's?
 * Thanks. Too bad ISRO's copyright is like it is.

They cannot really be 'envisioned' for experiments anymore, they are in space. Either they have experiments planned for them, or they do not: INS-1A and INS-1B are technology demonstrator nanosatellites envisioned for various experiments. ✅

Fix this grammar: 103 co-passenger satellites contributed to approximately 664 kilograms (1,464 lb) making the total payload of 1,378 kilograms (3,038 lb). ✅
 * Try this instead: 'The 103 co-passenger satellites weighed approximately 664 kilograms (1,464 lb), bringing the total payload mass to 1,378 kilograms (3,038 lb).' ✅

Reword this: The LEMUR satellites, each weighing 4.6 kilograms (10 lb), carried two different payloads namely SENSE for vessel tracking purposes and STRATOS for atmospheric measurements ✅

I think there should be a hyphen between micro and research: is a micro research satellite. ✅

In this instance, 'the' should not be capitalized in 'the Netherlands'

In some citations and in the text, ISRO is capitalized ISRO, sometimes Isro. Keep it consistent for whatever it is supposed to be. ✅

Rephrase from: 'Weighing roughly 5 kilograms (11 lb), each separated from the rocket in different directions to avoid collision.'

To: 'Weighing roughly 5 kilograms (11 lb) each, the satellites separated from the rocket in different directions to avoid collision.' ✅

I do not think it should be 'the ISRO,' for the same reason we do not call it 'the NASA.' I believe in all those instances it should just be ISRO.

Move citations from the lead to the body of the article. ✅
 * Still looks like they are in the lead? ✅

Since you started this with an em dash, it should end in it as well, so go from ' — the INS-1A and INS-1B, will' to '— the INS-1A and INS-1B — will' ✅

Capitalize Earth ✅

Add some wikilinks to the caption

Research of what? A bit generic as written. - BGUSAT from Israel is used primarily for research and avionic systems.

Did they specifically how much money they are recovering yet? - The ISRO released a statement stating that it will recover half of the mission's cost from the foreign countries whose satellites it launched.

I would recommend rephrasing these sentences to say something like 'Al Farabi-1, designed by Kazakhstan's space agency' (whatever their space agency is called). The way it is currently phrased makes the satellites sound like citizens of the countries. Maybe I am being a little too nitpicky. ' Al Farabi-1 from Kazakhstan, Nayif-1 from the United Arab Emirates, and PEASSS from The Netherlands are technology demonstrator satellites whereas DIDO-2 from Switzerland is a micro research satellite. BGUSAT from Israel is used primarily for research and avionic systems.' ✅

Is this number of significant digits really necessary? Also, convert to miles: at an altitude of 510.383 km ✅
 * This didn't change?
 * Special:Diff/773965312
 * Sorry, I should have been more specific. The number of significant digits refers to the fact that the number is 510.383, instead of just rounding to a nice number like 510. Generally when writing about scientific things, the writer will round to the nearest 'reasonable' number. It was something my professors got after me about until I got better at it. Does that make more sense? For example, if it was really necessary (and I do not think it is), I would probably write it as 510,383 meters instead, and even then I would round it to maybe 510,400 meters. Let me know if you disagree.  Kees08 (Talk)  ✅