Talk:PTV (Family Guy)/GA1

GA Review
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Introduction
Ok...I'm going to review your article today! Generally, as a member of WP:SIMPSONS, I'm more active at nominating articles rather than reviewing them. Right. So... I usually start by breaking the entire article down into sections, and then individually reviewing this section. A common method, this allows closer scrutiny and a chance to focus on the smaller aspects of WP:MOS. Then, to view the structure, I will take a look at the overarching quality of the article and determine whether this article passes the WP:GAN criteria or not. Cheers,  I 'mperator 22:06, 27 July 2009 (UTC)

Lead

 * Nothing really wrong here; all looks good. Few grammar mistakes involving commas, though, in the first paragraph. Look closely at the last two sentences.

Plot

 * No real quality problems, though there are a few grammar mistakes which I'll list below:
 * On which he broadcasts classic shows in their original, unedited versions... is a run-on.
 * I've fixed a few of the structural problems and reworded some of the things which I felt could use it.

Production and Theme

 * This might just be my opinion, but it seems like the "theme" subsection of the production section should be merged into the Cultural References section.
 * Another general comment about this section: could you possibly expand the production bit? For example, just from the first reference, I could see quite a bit of detail being added.

Cultural references

 * See above (Merge with Theme section and expand per refs)

Reception

 * Can't really find anything wrong here; nice work!

General Notes

 * Overall, a really nice article, though it does have a few flaws.
 * The grammar is just about perfect (I've fixed most of the them, but I decided to leave that one above for you to fix), as is the wording.
 * However, as a result of the concerns with the Production/Theme/Cultural references section, I'm afraid I'm going to have to put it on hold.
 * It shouldn't take long to fix those errors and to expand the section. Try to research a bit more and add more detail, and it'll be fine. It probably won't even take the entire week. When you're done, just give me a shout on my talk page. Cheers,  I 'mperator 20:04, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Hi, first of all, thanks for the review and for calling my grammar near-perfect. Second, I am currently editing from a library in Sweden (they have a really strange keypad; look Å). Anyhow, as I am on my vacation, I was wondering if I could wait until Monday (when I return) to fix your comments. Thanks.-- Music 26/  11  14:38, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * No problem, and you're welcome. :D And, yeah, that's fine; I'll wait. Cheers,  I 'mperator 14:56, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Your concerns have been taken care off.-- Music 26/  11  09:07, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Note: I couldn't find any info in the ref that wasn't already in the article.-- Music 26/  11  12:49, 5 August 2009 (UTC)