Talk:Paava Mannippu/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 15:30, 14 December 2016 (UTC)

Will get to this soon. JAG UAR   15:30, 14 December 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks for taking up the GAR, amigo. —  Ssven2  Looking at you, kid 16:24, 14 December 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

 * "is a 1961 Indian, Tamil-language, drama film" - I don't think there's any need for the commas. I based this on one of Pavan's GAs; "is a 1988 Indian Telugu-language musical-drama film", so it should be safe to lose the commas
 * an ensemble cast of:" - no need for the semi-colon
 * I've merged the lead's middle two paragraphs into one, if that's OK. Feel free to revert
 * "The film achieved cult status in Tamil cinema. It was dubbed into Telugu as Paapa Pariharam" - this would flow better if merged into one sentence: The film achieved cult status in Tamil cinema and was dubbed into Telugu as Paapa Pariharam
 * "In the meantime, Manickam, who has served time in prison for the murder Aalavandhar committed, is released from jail for good behaviour and joins" - replace the two commas with em dashes: In the meantime, Manickam—who has served time in prison for the murder Aalavandhar committed—is released from jail for good behaviour and joins
 * Wouldn't the quote box in the Cast section be more appropriate in the history section?
 * "becoming evergreen hits" - what does evergreen mean?
 * "Paava Mannippu was one of Bhimsingh's many successful films in the "Pa"" - I'm probably wrong, but wouldn't this need to be italicised if it's the series name?
 * No dead links!

This is very impressive work. It is well written, comprehensive, and well researched. I picked out a few nitpicks, but once they're all clarified then this should be good to go. Feel free to ignore some you disagree with! JAG UAR   18:43, 15 December 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the GAR, Jaguar. All of your above comments have been resolved. —  Ssven2  Looking at you, kid 07:24, 16 December 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks! I'll put the green circle thing on the top of the article now. JAG  UAR   22:11, 16 December 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks again. —  Ssven2  Looking at you, kid 04:23, 17 December 2016 (UTC)