Talk:Packers sweep/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 06:47, 20 September 2018 (UTC)

I plan on reviewing this article some time over the next week. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:47, 20 September 2018 (UTC)

Lead

 * After "known as a power sweep," briefly describe the play itself (e.g. that it is a running play, and that the back runs parallel). See the regular "Sweep" page for ideas.
 * Let me know what you think about this addition. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 14:33, 21 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Lombardi, along with other coaches and commentators, gave a lot of credit for the team's success in the 1960s to the Packers sweep. ===>>> Lombardi, along with other coaches and commentators, gave the Packers sweep a lot of credit for the team's success in the 1960s.

The sweep

 * The sweep is a running play in American football where a back ====>>> The sweep is a running play in American football where a back (typically the running back or half back) <<<=== add the part in parentheses
 * optional pass plays ===>> option pass plays

Lombardi era

 * later defined as an "offensive coordinator" ===>>> now known as an "offensive coordinator"
 * Even when defenses were shifted
 * optional pass plays ===> option pass plays
 * Other coaches in the league had great respect for the Packers sweep, <<<==== which other coaches?
 * Each of those offensive players was instrumental in the success ====>>> Each of those offensive players was instrumental to the success
 * different runners or optional pass plays ====>>> different runners or option pass plays
 * Many of these players identified Lombardi's coaching and drive for perfection as an important part of keys to their accomplishments and the team's success. (word choice could be better; maybe you can think of something else)
 * I changed the word to "essential". « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 14:33, 21 September 2018 (UTC)

Legacy

 * The Packers of the 1960s were dominant in all respects. ====>>> The Packers of the 1960s were dominant in many respects.
 * This dominance and continued success make made the Packers sweep one of the most famous football plays in history. <<<=== Do you have a quote of someone calling it one of the most famous plays in history? I feel like that statement is WP:PUFFERY unless you can attribute it to someone (or several people).
 * From Ref 1: "Most of all, it is there in the images of one play, run over and over again, and in the voice of Ray Scott calling the most famous play in pro football history."
 * From Ref 14: "Not only was Lombardi’s power sweep arguably the most famous play in football history, it also was one that required maximum precision in a sport where execution is pretty much the be-all and end-all of all plays."
 * I thought of adding the word "arguably" but instead I added "one of the most famous." I believe this accurately reflects the sources. If necessary, I may be able to find another reference or two from When Pride Still Mattered, A Life of Vince Lombardi.  « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 14:33, 21 September 2018 (UTC)

Overall

 * No plagiarism detected.
 * Images seem fine.
 * All the links work!
 * No bare refs.
 * No dab links.

Overall, the article looks very solid! Even the copyediting suggestions are minor. Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:46, 21 September 2018 (UTC)
 * Awesome, thanks for another review ! I have made all of your c/e recommendations here. I responded to two items above for further discussions. Cheers, « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 14:33, 21 September 2018 (UTC)

Looks good! I added two more minor changes. Passing! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 16:53, 21 September 2018 (UTC)