Talk:Pacorus II/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 21:38, 19 March 2020 (UTC)

Happy to review the article.

Lead section

 * Add the regnal dates for Artabanus II (12-38/41) in the main text, as they are not there and should be.
 * Summarize within the lead section (i) something about the Parthian interests in the east (ii) information about the coinage of Pacorus II
 * Is the 'House - Arsacid dynasty' line in the infobox needed? Pacorus II is already named near the top as king of the Parthian Empire.
 * Yes, this is a bit confusing one indeed. The royal family of the rulers is known as the "Arsacids", hence why we have Arsacids of Armenia, Iberia etc. Although Arsacid is also often used a synonym for the Parthian Empire itself. --HistoryofIran (talk) 00:25, 25 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Understood.

Name

 * 'genitive' should be spelt genitive.
 * bronze statue of Heracles in Seleucia as Greek Pakhorou - is this the correct link for Greek?.
 * Think so. --HistoryofIran (talk) 00:40, 25 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks.

Background

 * He was one of Vologases I's younger sons... - I can't find where reference 6 (Holl. pp. 207-8) states this.
 * Pacorus was a son of the Parthian king Vologases I (r. 51–78).[5] He was one of Vologases I's younger sons, being born in c. 61/2. - I suggest this is cut down to Pacorus, who was one of the younger sons of the Parthian king Vologases I (r. 51–78), was born in c. 61/2.
 * This section would I think benefit from additional text that explains more about the Parthian Empire—e.g. its origins, its enemies, how stable the empire was prior to the rule of Pacorus—and also the lack of information about Pacorus' early years.
 * Reference 6 (Holl. pp. 207-8) doesn't appear to verify when Pacorus was born. Is another source needed here?
 * I've changed that a bit, what do you think? --HistoryofIran (talk) 01:22, 25 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Yes it's an improvement, but why are there so many citations for this sentence?
 * Good question, I've reduced it to two citations now lel. --HistoryofIran (talk) 18:22, 25 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks, HistoryofIran.

Reign

 * I did not find information to verify the first sentence in reference 9 (Dab. p. 391).
 * If I remember correctly I only used that source for the date his reign ended, whilst the other one (which is a bit outdated) states how he met his end. --HistoryofIran (talk) 21:41, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I would suggest that reference 10 (Ch.& Sch. pp. 574–580) is moved to the end of 'Pacorus was soon met by a revolt by his brother Vologases II', instead of being where it is.
 * Link William Watson (William Watson (sinologist))
 * based on oral accounts of his Parthian hosts. - Wood in reference 16 appears to describe the Chinese account of the Romans, not the Parthians.
 * Eh, dunno. This is the bit I copied and pasted from the FA Parthian Empire article. Removed Wood. --HistoryofIran (talk) 21:58, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...military victories against the Xiongnu... - I would extend the Wikilink Han–Xiongnu War to the whole of this phrase.
 * kingdom Osroene - should read kingdom of Osroene.

Coinage

 * he was beardless - better as he appeared as beardless? and replace a developing beard is illustrated on his coins. with he is depicted with a beard?
 * ...first only later during his late reign... - doesn't make any sense to me.
 * Changed it a bit, what about now? --HistoryofIran (talk) 00:29, 25 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Changed it a bit more, it think it now works..
 * Reference 24 (Rose 2004) does not appear to mention the goddess Tyche. Can you provide a specific page for this citation?
 * Looks like I misread. Removed it. --HistoryofIran (talk) 01:32, 25 March 2020 (UTC)
 * with a bow - link bow with Bow and arrow.
 * replace 'a representation of Anahita' with a representation of the Iranian goddess Anahita.
 * The last sentence seems to imply that Ashi is, like Anahita, a diety. Does it need to be made clearer that Ashi is a concept?
 * I've changed it a little bit since this comment. I think it's fine atm. --HistoryofIran (talk) 21:32, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Reference 25 (Rez. 2013) appears to give the wrong page, as i found the information on p. 770, not p. 771.

Offspring

 * Besides Vologases II... - Vologases III?
 * Link 'kings of Armenia' to List of Armenian kings.

Template: Rulers of the Parthian Empire (247 BC – 224 AD)

 * I would hide the full list (personal preference!)

On hold
There may be other comments for me to add, but they should be relatively minor. Please feel fre to query anything I have misunderstood - and keep well! Amitchell125 (talk) 19:30, 24 March 2020 (UTC)


 * What do you think? I've added some comments as well. --HistoryofIran (talk) 22:04, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Sorry not to get back to you sooner, I'll check the article over tonight before passing it. Amitchell125 (talk) 19:16, 10 April 2020 (UTC)

Passed

 * Well done! AM