Talk:Paddy Fox/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 08:57, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

I will take this one, comments to follow in the next few days. Zawed (talk) 08:57, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

Apologies for the length of time taken to come back to this. Fox is an interesting chap, clearly very industrious and charitable. My comments are as follows:

Lead
 * Seems a little long given overall length of article.
 * Agreed and trimmed


 * British Army should be added into the infobox.
 * Added

Early life and career
 * "born at a racing stables": should that be plural given the use of "a"?
 * It's common in (British?) horseracing to say "a racing stables", I presume it's to emphasise that it's a bigger operation rather than just a shed with horses in it


 * link Belfast, Oxfordshire, British Army, General Officer Commanding, possibly Northumbrian District
 * All done

Recruiter
 * link Peterlee, County Durham
 * Done


 * A explanation of what a Long Service Recruiter is probably warranted.
 * Removed it, the only mention of the term online was in reports on Fox so probably a mistake by the journalist


 * The LG cite should go to page 7392, not 7391.
 * Oops, fixed


 * "and bar" bar should be linked to Medal bar.
 * Linked only "bar" to avoid run-on with the medal link


 * "Fox's BEM citation commended him for setting a "splendid example of the Army to the public"": the quoted portion within this section should be cited. I note that the LG cite doesn't say this, I wonder if you are referring to the recommendation for the BEM?
 * Yes, you are right. The source used "citation statement" which is apparently part of the nomination form, I've amended to clarify.

Retirement
 * If there are articles for them, link St Cuthbert's Church and Lucy Portman
 * No articles


 * If known, suggest adding place of burial.
 * Alas, I couldn't find any record if he was buried or cremated

Images
 * These are all appropriately tagged.

That's it for me. Zawed (talk) 09:22, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review Zawed (and no worries about the time taken, we're all busy). I think I've answered everything above.
 * This all looks good. I am passing this as a GA as I believe that it meets the relevant criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 04:53, 29 January 2022 (UTC)