Talk:Pakistan at the 2010 Winter Olympics/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:31, 11 July 2018 (UTC)

Will read this article and leave comments. MWright96 (talk) 08:31, 11 July 2018 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "He was also the country's opening and closing ceremonies flag bearer." - change to Abbas was also the country's flag bearer in the opening and closing ceremonies.
 * Done  Kees08  (Talk)  

Background

 * Wikilink Naltar Valley and Ski Federation of Pakistan
 * Done  Kees08  (Talk)  
 * Link 1948 Games to 1948 Summer Olympics
 * Done  Kees08  (Talk)  
 * Wikilink the word opening to 2010 Winter Olympics opening ceremony and closing ceremonies to 2010 Winter Olympics closing ceremony; also the same needs to be done in the lead
 * Done  Kees08  (Talk)  

Alpine skiing

 * "He trained for two weeks in 2008 and six weeks in 2009 in Austria," - try and six weeks in Austria in 2009
 * Done, not sure it sounds better though.  Kees08  (Talk)  
 * " since he did not have money to compete in other competitions." - change to contest to avoid close reptition of the same word
 * Done  Kees08  (Talk)  
 * "The event was supposed to start on February 21, but was postponed two days to allow for another event to take place." - source? and which event exactly?
 * Added the event and moved the reference closer to the material
 * "His total was 3:20.58, for 79th place overall," - total time
 * Done  Kees08  (Talk)