Talk:Palestine at the 1996 Summer Olympics/GA3

GA Review
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Nominator: 12:41, 14 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 15:40, 18 May 2024 (UTC)


 * @LunaEatsTuna Hello! Just would like an update on the review^^ Arconning (talk) 05:54, 22 May 2024 (UTC)


 * Sorry for the wait! The review is done. Template:LunaEatsTunaSig  (talk), posted at 04:15, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
 * @LunaEatsTuna Everything has been addressed :) Arconning (talk) 12:23, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
 * Nice work! After two failed GANs by different authors, I am finally happy to pass this article for GA status. Congrats! Template:LunaEatsTunaSig  (talk), posted at 19:16, 24 May 2024 (UTC)

Will review this. Template:LunaEatsTunaSig (talk), posted at 15:40, 18 May 2024 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * Specify what persecution they were avoiding at the 1936 games for readers who might be unaware.
 * Done.
 * Membership and recognition
 * "in 1931, it was" – should be "in 1931, but was".
 * Done.
 * I would specify "Israeli occupation of Palestine".
 * Done.
 * "to protest the decision to the International Olympic Committee" – use IOC here, as the abbreviation was already specified.
 * Done.
 * This is a personal preference but I would combine the second and third paragraphs into one just because both are fairly short and they seem related enough.
 * Done.
 * Opening ceremony
 * The first sentence is a bit of a sea of blue; maybe changing the first part to " At the opening ceremony for the 1996 Summer Olympics, […]" will help to fix this a bit.
 * Done.
 * "Olympic Games stating that his main purpose" change to "Olympic Games. He stated that his main purpose" for better flow.
 * Done.
 * "between the Olympic Committee of Israel (OCI)" – already mentioned in the previous section; move the abbreviation there and change this to just OCI.
 * Done.
 * Delegation
 * Optional: "who was going to be picked" – I would do "chosen" here just because it sounds more formal. :)
 * Done.
 * I would remove "the personal security force of Palestinian National Authority leader Yasser Arafat" – it seems unnecessary to explain what Force 17 is, seeing as we do not explain what the Palestinian Authority etc. is; the reader can simply click the link if they are curious.
 * Done.
 * Recommend "However, Salama eventually" for better sentence flow.
 * Done.
 * Athletics
 * Both footnotes in this section need citing.
 * Done.
 * Combine the third and fourth sentences into "He finished last out of 21 athletes that finished the race, and recorded a time of 34 minutes and 40.50 seconds."
 * Done.
 * I do not think "After competing in his event, Abu Maraheel eventually became the first ever athlete to represent Palestine at the Olympic Games" sentence is really necessary.
 * Done.
 * Other
 * (If known/applicable) recommend adding template:use X English.
 * Not really known/applicable so not added, will keep in mind for future projects!
 * Spotcheck
 * Good; passes spotchecks I did on refs 2, 5, 10 and 12.