Talk:Panic Room/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 21:55, 16 January 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Some Dude From North Carolina wanna talk? 21:55, 16 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Sounds good, give me a Ping when you’ve put up some things to address. Rusted AutoParts  23:07, 16 January 2021 (UTC)

Basic stuff and comments

 * Archive all archivable sources.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:22, 19 January 2021 (UTC)

Infobox

 * The box office reference should link to the film's title summary, not its domestic release.
 * Chompy Ace 21:18, 17 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Film's budget and running time need references.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 21:18, 17 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The "produced by" list should go Gavin Polone, Judy Hofflund, David Koepp, and then Ceán Chaffin per the film's billing block.
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  19:23, 17 January 2021 (UTC)

Lead

 * The sentence "Koepp's screenplay was inspired by news coverage in 2000 about panic rooms" should probably go in the first paragraph of the lead, and should also be merged with the sentence before it to something like "The script was written by David Koepp, whose screenplay was inspired by news coverage in 2000 about panic rooms."
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 13:46, 18 January 2021 (UTC)


 * This section says the film made $196.4 million. However, the film actually made $197.1 million.
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  19:30, 17 January 2021 (UTC)


 * With the above edit in mind, change "$100 million" to "$100.7 million".
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  19:30, 17 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The Saturn Award nomination seems like a good thing to add to the final paragraph.
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  19:33, 17 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "Foster would receive a nomination for the Saturn Award for Best Actress." "Foster would later receive a Saturn Award nomination for Best Actress."
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 13:48, 18 January 2021 (UTC)

Plot

 * In the last sentence, the single use of the word "later" doesn't quite fit in, so I would change it to "A few days later".
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  19:25, 17 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Additionally, I suggest merging the last sentence with the second-to-last paragraph.
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  19:25, 17 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "Later, Stephen has survived, while Meg and Sarah, recovered from their harrowing ordeal, search the newspaper for a new home." "A few days later, Stephen, Meg, and Sarah search the newspaper for a new home, having recovered from their harrowing ordeal."
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  19:25, 17 January 2021 (UTC)

Cast

 * Link the word "dailies".
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  19:21, 17 January 2021 (UTC)

Development

 * No problems here.

Pre-production

 * "make actual production difficult for him" "make actual production difficult for him and his crew".
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  19:36, 17 January 2021 (UTC)

Filming

 * "Conrad Hall, Jr." Conrad W. Hall
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  19:21, 17 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Link Darius Khondji and Conrad W. Hall per consistency.
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  19:26, 17 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "the end of January 2001" should be fixed/correctly formatted (title, publisher, etc.).
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 14:05, 18 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Additionally, move that same reference to the end of the sentence it's in.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 14:06, 18 January 2021 (UTC)
 * The reference wasn't moved.
 * moved. Chompy Ace 00:32, 19 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "She also returned two months later for additional filming. Filming was completed in November 2001." "She also returned two months later for additional filming, which concluded that November."
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 14:07, 18 January 2021 (UTC)

Visual and practical effects

 * This section seems kinda short, so I recommend combining both paragraphs into a single one.
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  19:28, 17 January 2021 (UTC)

Conspiracy thrillers and feminism

 * "divided by gender. She describes the male protagonist" "divided by gender, describing the male protagonist"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 13:50, 18 January 2021 (UTC)

Medicine and technology as themes

 * No issues here.

Approach to mortality

 * Looks good.

Release

 * Link Seven and Fight Club.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 13:42, 18 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "Los Angeles, California" should be properly formatted. Additionally, the current link is dead.
 * ✅ removed because this archive is redirected or dead Chompy Ace 14:14, 18 January 2021 (UTC)
 * No need to remove, an archive can be found here.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 00:36, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Just realized that the archive doesn't have any information on the premiere, and should therefore be replaced. Luckily, I found a reference from CBS that can be swapped in. Some Dude From North Carolina wanna talk? 01:02, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:09, 19 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "worldwide total of $196.4 million. (In 2006 in Hong Kong, the film had a re-release that grossed $682K, increasing the total to $197.1 million.)" "worldwide total of $196.4 million (In 2006, the film had a re-release in Hong Kong that grossed $682 thousand, increasing the total to $197.1 million)."
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 14:17, 18 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "ranks fifth" is subscription-only and should be marked as such.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 13:57, 18 January 2021 (UTC)

Critical reception

 * The claim that critics "compared the film to the works of Alfred Hitchcock" needs a reference.
 * The reference Swallow 2007, page 172, the first three sentences. It does not need to be repeated for each one. Erik (talk &#124; contrib) (ping me) 13:45, 18 January 2021 (UTC)
 * ✔️ Chompy Ace 02:39, 19 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Change the title of the Rotten Tomatoes reference to simply "Panic Room (2002)".
 * ✅ as Panic Room per consistency with other film articles using Cite rt Chompy Ace 13:52, 18 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Only two reviews? This section can definitely be expanded.
 * Need more links for reviews? Chompy Ace 02:14, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
 * I'm just saying that there are definitely reviews around the performances, directing, writing, or even negative reviews that can be added.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:48, 19 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Additionally, the extensive use of quotes needs to be reduced per WP:RECEPTION.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:14, 19 January 2021 (UTC)

Home media

 * Link the reference after "to buy the film" to the actual citation.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 14:23, 18 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Move the reference after "special edition DVD" to the end of the sentence its in.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 14:28, 18 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Mark the reference after "including one by the director" as dead as the citation has been redirected to a different article.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 14:29, 18 January 2021 (UTC)

Accolades

 * "Contemporary Film award" "Contemporary Film Award".
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 14:19, 18 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The Art Directors Guild Award reference should be a verdict, not a list of nominations.
 * ✔️, winners indicate asterisks as shown in the website Chompy Ace 14:48, 18 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Same thing for the Saturn Award nomination.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 14:40, 18 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Combine both paragraphs into one.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 14:21, 18 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Move the Saturn Award nomination to the end.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 14:20, 18 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "For acting" "For her performance in the film".
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 14:19, 18 January 2021 (UTC)