Talk:Parawixia bistriata

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 15 September 2020 and 17 December 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): ShawnXiaoWiki29Sept.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 02:06, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

Dohrniphora
Unsure why it's redlinked; article does exist and I can't seem to spot the spelling difference Elinruby (talk) 04:31, 29 November 2020 (UTC)

Overall, this is a really high-quality article! I added hyperlinks to things like: South America, web, climate, venom, and other words that were not yet hyperlinked, in order to help the reader get linked to relevant pages. I also changed some of the wording under the “Habitat and Distribution” Section, as it was slightly confusing and misleading, and deleted two sentences detailing the weather in Argentina that felt extraneous. In addition, I deleted some citation links that were unnecessary (for example, the author cited the same source at the end of many sentences in one section; I changed it to just have one citation at the end of the paragraph, as all of the information in that paragraph was from the same one source). One thing that I think this page could really benefit from is the addition of some photographs. Even if there are not any photographs of the spider available, it could be useful to add some photos of other things, like distribution maps or the webs. juliaskittle (talk) 11:44, 3 December 2020 (UTC)

Behavioral Ecology Student Suggestions
I only made slight edits, altering a few sentences for clarity ( in the description and also in the colony forming dynamics and group feeding sections ). I agree with suggestions made earlier to include photographs or drawings relating to the spider. Also it may be helpful to limit the scientific language. I tried to change a few of the sentences to use more common language. Overall a great article, with good use of citations and wide variety of information. 17lchang (talk) 22:37, 3 December 2020 (UTC)

ahamed I just made some very small edits that could help with the overall flow of the paper. I also added a few hyperlinks as well. Something that I would suggest is adding images, and I am unsure if there are any on the Wikimedia page but it is something worth looking into. Something else I tried to change was making the wording a bit more basic for the average reader. You use very strong wording which I appreciated as well and I also loved that you seemed very knowledgeable on the material. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ahamed01 (talk • contribs) 23:32, 9 December 2020 (UTC)