Talk:Parnassius smintheus

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Edits
Hi, I'm Ji-Yun Suh, and I'll be editing this page in the coming week extensively. I'm looking at the page now, and a lot of the writing currently don't have many pertinent citations, so I may edit and replace a lot of the parts that don't have reliable sources. Let me know if you have any questions or concerns! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lily1004 (talk • contribs) 21:42, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

Hey, so I've gone ahead and deleted most of the parts that didn't have reliable sources, and added new sections, including life cycle, food, dispersal, conservation, and more. Let me know if you think there are any errors! Thanks.Lily1004 (talk) 02:36, 25 October 2017 (UTC)

Review
Overall, I think this article is very good and with some minor changes and additions, this could receive good article status. I rearranged the formatting of this article. Originally, subspecies and similar species were placed in the middle of the article. In this format, these two categories seem like a distraction to the actual material in the article, so I moved them to the end before references. I also rewrote a few sentences to make them sound less subjective and more objective and straightforward. I also rewrote some sentences to correct grammar. I added my comments and what I changed to the talk page. Sahilmehta97 (talk) 20:25, 29 October 2017 (UTC)

Great work so far! I first fixed the capitalization of your titles so that it follows Wikipedia standards. I also contributed a short section on “Similar species.” As a side note, the other information in that section do not have proper citations. Please look into that. When reading your “Range and Habitat” section, the sentence “It has been suggested that males may prefer meadows with greater food sources more than females do due to needing more energy for greater flights and energy demand” confused me a bit because there was no explanation on why males may need more energy until later on in the “Mating” section (which doesn’t come for awhile). You can probably make this less confusing by adding an explanatory sentence in the earlier section. When making further edits, I would like to suggest more research on “Pupae” in the life cycles section and to discuss any predators this butterfly may have. Y.shin (talk) 23:10, 29 October 2017 (UTC)

I think this is a very good article! I didn't change much, I added a few links to other Wikipedia pages that would be helpful, and I fixed a few minor grammar things and rearranged a few sentences to make them clearer. I think that you have a great mating and courtship section, and I think it would be interesting to add a section on enemies such as predators, parasites, and diseases as you mention some threats briefly but do not expand upon it. But overall, it was well-written and easy to read. Lauraem7 (talk) 09:53, 29 October 2017 (UTC)