Talk:Partition Sejm/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 17:50, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

Hi Piotrus, I'll be glad to take this one. Initial comments in the next 1-5 days. Thanks as always for your amazing work on Polish history topics. -- Khazar2 (talk) 17:50, 6 October 2013 (UTC)


 * File:Picture of Europe for July 1772.PNG needs a US PD tag. -- Khazar2 (talk) 17:55, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "that Sejm was the site of Tadeusz Rejtan's famous gesture of protest." -- it's not really clear in the article body what this gesture of protest was, or that it was famous; do your sources elaborate on this? -- Khazar2 (talk) 19:56, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
 * The article Polish anarchy links to a discussion of 20th-century anarchist movements in Poland, which I don't think is what's meant here. Is there another link that can be put here, or should this just be delinked? -- Khazar2 (talk) 19:56, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

More to follow soon! -- Khazar2 (talk) 19:56, 6 October 2013 (UTC)


 * Done, done and delinked. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 06:44, 7 October 2013 (UTC)


 * " Tadeusz Rejtan, Samuel Korsak and Stanisław Bohuszewicz, also Franciszek Jerzmanowski, Stanisław Kożuchowski, Rupert Dunin, Jan Tymowski, J. Zaremba, Michał Radoszewski, Ignacy Suchecki, Tadeusz Wołodkowicz" --it's unclear to me why this list has sublists in it-- that is, why it doesn't just list them all together instead of giving three and then saying "also". -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:35, 7 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "notably" should probably be cut per WP:WTW. Now that Rejtan's protest is discussed on the next line anyway, I think it's clear that his protest was an impressive standout. -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:35, 7 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "immortalized" -- calling this painting "immortal" is a subtle value judgement, and a bit hyperbolic--what would you think of "depicted" or "portrayed"? -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:35, 7 October 2013 (UTC)
 * It is a famous, acclaimed painting, so I think this word choice is justified. See dedicated article at Rejtan (painting) I wrote few days ago :) --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 05:43, 15 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "Some were arrested and exiled" -- is the "some" here "senators"? Or critics of partition more generally? -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:35, 7 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "Cardinal Laws" -- is it possible to give a phrase of context about what these are? -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:35, 7 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "the starostwo territories, Crown lands would be awarded through an auction" -- I'm not sure I understand how this part fits grammatically into this sentence--can this be clarified?
 * "It was nonetheless a significant improvement in the Commonwealth governance" -- this seems to border on opinion/interpretation. Could you say "According to historians X and Y"? Or clarify why it was an improvement in governance?
 * Hmmm, I'd if I had access to the sources, but I don't, so I am afraid I don't recall which, or if all, support this interpretation. One, at the very least, did. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 05:43, 15 October 2013 (UTC)
 * It would be helpful to define "liberum veto" in a parenthetical or an explanatory footnote, since it's a recurring concept in the article and would be unfamiliar to non-Polish readers.
 * "including from 1776 also the hetmans" -- I'm not clear what this means--the hetmans also supervised the magnates? Or the hetmans were also supervised by the council? You might break this off into a second sentence.
 * Uh, I am not sure what I meant, I removed this sentence. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 05:43, 15 October 2013 (UTC)
 * "As such, its creation is universally seen" -- "universally" seems a little strong--is this the language one these sources use?
 * The analysis of the allegorical picture in footnote A needs a source per WP:OR. -- Khazar2 (talk) 13:01, 7 October 2013 (UTC)
 * @Khazar2: Addressed all in those edits, but for the issues I specifically commented on above. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 05:43, 15 October 2013 (UTC)

Hey,, just wanted to ping you a reminder about this one. Cheers, -- Khazar2 (talk) 18:41, 13 October 2013 (UTC)
 * Ah, Khazar2, sorry, I missed that. I'll get to this within the next 48h and ping you when I am done. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 03:06, 14 October 2013 (UTC)

Checklist
That seems to take care of my comments above; starting checklist now, probably just about ready to pass. -- Khazar2 (talk) 14:09, 15 October 2013 (UTC) , I think this is just about ready to pass. I have one more concern noted above. Thanks again for all your work on this! I've learned quite a bit of Polish history from reading your contributions... -- Khazar2 (talk) 14:14, 15 October 2013 (UTC)
 * @User:Khazar2: Agreed, replaced it with more reliable refs: . --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 03:41, 16 October 2013 (UTC)