Talk:Party Favor (song)/GA1

GA Review
The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.''

Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 10:43, 6 July 2020 (UTC)

I'll review this one for you later today, as a frequent collaborator of yours --Kyle Peake (talk) 10:43, 6 July 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Cover art needs alt text
 * Replace infobox hlist with bullet points lists
 * Target 7-inch vinyl to 7-inch per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * Remove digital download and streaming since they are sourced for the B-side, not the song itself
 * Audio video → Audio
 * Wikilink all lowercase to itself and add citation(s) backing this stylization up; maybe write it out in the body with them while keeping this in the lead?
 * "American singer Billie Eilish" → "American singer Billie Eilish from her debut studio EP, Don't Smile at Me (2017)"
 * "It was released by" → "The song was released by"
 * "as the final single from Eilish's debut studio EP, Don't Smile at Me (2017). It was released on a 7-inch vinyl along with a cover of "Hotline Bling" during Record Store Day." → "on a 7-inch vinyl as the eighth and final single from the EP on Record Store Day, along with a cover of "Hotline Bling." with the appropriate wikilinks and targets
 * "The latter also produced the song" → "with the latter solely handling the song's production"
 * Start second para on the following sentence
 * "Eilish's lyrics on the song" → "the lyrics of "Party Favor""
 * "several topics, including Eilish breaking" → "Eilish breaking" since the body seems to only lead to a description of that subject
 * "received mainly decent reviews" → "received mainly positive reviews" since decent indicates average type
 * "It was performed live during Eilish's" → "It was performed live by Eilish during her" and keep this as part of the second para in the new order
 * "It was also" → "The song was ultimately"

✅

Background and composition

 * "was released as the final single on Eilish's debut EP Don't Smile at Me on April 21, 2018. "Party Favor" was released as a single on the exclusive pink 7-inch vinyl on Record Store Day, along with" → "was released on a 7-inch vinyl as the eighth and final single from Don't Smile at Me on April 21, 2018, coinciding with Record Store Day for that year, along with" with the targets
 * Mention the labels that the release was through in this sentence
 * Introduce Drake as Canadian rapper
 * Target B-side to A-side and B-side
 * "Eilish's cover of "Hotline Bling" was later" → "The cover version was later"
 * "by Darkroom and Interscope Records" → "by the aforementioned labels"
 * "by the singer and" → "by Eilish and"
 * "by the studio personnel, John Greenham, and" → "by studio personnel John Greenham and"
 * "According to sheet music website Musicnotes.com," → "According to Musicnotes.com,"
 * Target key to Key (music)
 * "where Eilish plays" → "that includes Eilish playing"
 * "tries everything to get him out of her life: Look" → "trying everything to get him out of her life: "Look"
 * "She warns her lover that she" → "Eilish warns her lover that she"
 * "Then halfway through the song, Eilish" → "Halfway through the song, Eilish then"
 * "on their birthday:" → "on his birthday:"
 * Target indie to Indie pop
 * "of Drake's 2015 hit" → "of the original version"

✅

Critical reception

 * Retitle to Reception
 * "received favorable reviews from critics" → "was met with generally favorable reviews from music critics"
 * Can you add more reviews to back up this claim since three is not enough?

Kyle Peake Since the song is not that popular, reviews for this song are quite hard to find. DarklyShadows (talk) 18:14, 6 July 2020 (UTC)


 * "said it was" → "said the song was"
 * "Insider Claudia Willen placed" → "Insider's Claudia Willen placed"
 * "with her calling it" → "with Willen calling it"
 * "can be" but that" → "can be," though stated that"
 * "like "Watch" and "Bitches Broken Hearts."" → "like 'Watch' and 'Bitches Broken Hearts'.""
 * "and 'Ocean Eyes'." but" → "and 'Ocean Eyes'," but"
 * "that Eilish persona"." → "that Eilish persona.""
 * Remove the no charts sentence as this feels like trivia
 * "The track has been awarded a gold certification" → "The track has been certified gold" with the target

✅

Live performances

 * This is only one sentence; either expand or delete the section and just place the citation after the tour sentence in the lead

✅

Track listing

 * Add citation to back this up

✅

Personnel

 * Retitle to Credits and personnel
 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel

✅

Certifications

 * Only cite sales+streaming at the bottom of the table

✅

Release history

 * Target 7-inch vinyl to 7-inch

✅

Final comments and verdict

 * until the identified issues are resolved; last time you did a good job of not missing what I requested, try to do that again here! --Kyle Peake (talk) 15:46, 6 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Remove the Focus on Family Source as it is a bias source due to its roots being set on "American fundamentalist Christian". MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 16:59, 6 July 2020 (UTC)

Kyle Peake I have done everything that needed to be fixed. Let me know if there is anything else that needs to be fixed. DarklyShadows (talk) 19:17, 6 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Did some copy editing but this is fine now. ✅! --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:07, 7 July 2020 (UTC)