Talk:Party in the U.S.A./GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Candy  o32  13:03, 19 September 2010 (UTC)


 * Hi IpodNano, I will be reviewing "Party in the U.S.A." against the GA criteria for you! Candy  o32  13:03, 19 September 2010 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Issues

 * The prose seems fine to me. Just a few minor issues, and it should be on its way!

Background

 * No comma after the but in the first sentence.
 * It has a comma now. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 19:24, 2 October 2010 (UTC)

Chart performance

 * Why is the CRIA listed as digital downloads for certs, while RIAA is shipments?
 * Because the CRIA certification for digital downloads has a different requirement than the physical singles certification. It's different and the source says "Party in the U.S.A." was awarded 4 times digital platinum. While in the RIAA, they are the same. It's a million sales for platinum -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 19:20, 2 October 2010 (UTC)

Music video

 * Non free images need to be 300x300
 * O.K. But since it is two images in one, I think it should be acceptable for the image to be the size it currently is. fi you disagree I'll lower the resolution. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 19:22, 2 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Lowered a bit. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 19:57, 2 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Eh, I'm still weary of it since all together it is still one non-free image, even though it is two stills. Candy  o32  21:12, 2 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Isn't its new size suitable? -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 22:06, 2 October 2010 (UTC)

Cover versions

 * Not a big deal, but are there anymore more cover versions that could be noted other than just those two. Just wondering to see if the section could be fleshed out more.
 * Not that I know of. I'll search for notables ones. -- ipodnano05</b> * <sup style="font-family:tahoma; color:SteelBlue;">leave@message 19:57, 2 October 2010 (UTC)

Miscellaneous

 * Could there be a release history and/or credits and personnel section?
 * Release histories is not something I think should be added to pages. I would add a personnel section but no other Miley Cyrus song articles have it so it would not be in cohesion. -- <b style="font-family:tahoma; color:LightBlue;">ipodnano05</b> * <sup style="font-family:tahoma; color:SteelBlue;">leave@message 20:20, 2 October 2010 (UTC)
 * I would recommend it, I won't push it since it isn't listed in WP:SONGS. 21:12, 2 October 2010 (UTC)


 * WP:ALTTEXT should be added to images.


 * Refs 26 is dead.


 * Composition - "In the verses, she details occurrences, like peers questioning her attire,[15] in Hollywood that cause for her to feel homesick and intimidated." Weird wording between "attire" and "in Hollywood" doesn't make sense.
 * The attire information is supposed to be an example for the occurrences. Therefore, it is put in commas. I replaced "like" with "such as". Maybe that helps distinguish the relationship between "attire" and "in Hollywood"? -- <b style="font-family:tahoma; color:LightBlue;">ipodnano05</b> * <sup style="font-family:tahoma; color:SteelBlue;">leave@message 20:24, 2 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Much better. Candy  o32  21:12, 2 October 2010 (UTC)


 * There are several spots in the chart performance where a comma needs to be placed in between two different ideas. (ex. the sentence about charting on the Pop Songs and Adult Pop Songs).


 * In music video, "Video conception sprang forward with the idea to resemble the scene in Grease where John Travolta sings "Sandy": in the scene, Travolta exits from a car and walks over to a jungle gym, where he sits on a swing and performs the song as projections are displayed in the background" --> Period after "Sandy", begin new sentence.
 * "The video won the MuchMusic Video Award for Best International Artist Video and was nominated for the MuchMusic Video Award for People's Choice: Favourite International Video, but lost to Adam Lambert's video for "Whataya Want From Me" at the 2010 MuchMusic Video Awards.[48]." This is a bit awkwardly organized. Mention something like "At the 2010 MuchMusic Awards, the song won the video for...........,but lost out in the category of.....to Adam Lambert's....."
 * "The video won the MuchMusic Video Award for Best International Artist Video and was nominated for the MuchMusic Video Award for People's Choice: Favourite International Video, but lost to Adam Lambert's video for "Whataya Want From Me" at the 2010 MuchMusic Video Awards.[48]." This is a bit awkwardly organized. Mention something like "At the 2010 MuchMusic Awards, the song won the video for...........,but lost out in the category of.....to Adam Lambert's....."


 * In live performances, "Child psychologist Wendi Fischer told Newsday Cyrus was communicating..." Comma or colon after Newsday.


 * Track listing need sources.


 * Ref 77 is messed up.

Begin to work on these fixes, and I'll post some more comments later. Candy o32  12:58, 27 September 2010 (UTC)