Talk:Pasarea Phoenix

The biography will be longer but I don't have the time to finish it. I also lack informations after 2002. any help welcomed! Dracken 06:58, 8 December 2005 (UTC)

I have cleaned up the bio and introduction considerably, mostly due I think to a lot of non-fluent English-speakers' edits. A lot of it was grammar and style edits to fix minor errors and awkwardness that most native speakers wouldn't have written in to the article, such as wavering back and forth on whether or not to use present tense (well, not the present tense we usually use in English, but I forget what it's called, because I know it's not the infinitive form) or past tense in the biography.

Hint for non-fluent English speakers: usually, only summaries of plotlines are to be written in the "literary" present tense - e.g. "Harry Potter then is told he is a wizard, and goes with Hagrid to a place called Diagon Alley.", not "Harry Potter was told he was a wizard and went to a place called Diagon Alley." - accounts of history, including biography, are to be written about in past tense, because they speak of past events - e.g. "The band then moved to a new studio in New York" not "The band moves to a new studio in New York". Does that help? I think I'm explaining it poorly compared to my literature teacher a few years back, but hopefully not too horribly. :P

Anyway, I had to fix a number of other small errors, for instance, with the song titles... I realize that in Romanian, apparently it's proper grammar for all but the first letter of the first word to not be capitilized, but it's not the same in English. For instance Love Me Do isn't spelled "Love me do" in English. And song titles I think should be in quotes, even if it's just the translation you put in parantheses.

I did a few other minor tweaks too. Hopefully, I didn't make anything incorrect in the process. Runa27 23:12, 3 August 2006 (UTC)