Talk:Patricia Beer/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Blue Rider (talk · contribs) 12:14, 5 October 2023 (UTC)

Comments
The review is done and the article is on hold. The main problem with this nomination is its broadness; after reading the article I'm still failing to see how is she notable. Surely the almost Poet Laureate of the UK's has a lot of sources out there that can help to establish her notability. I highly recommend more information to be added regarding the content of her works and their influence. Regards.  The Blue  Rider   22:47, 8 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Yes, I wrote this in about two days or so. If it's OK with you I'd like to leave it open for a while so I can get everything square. Therapyisgood (talk) 03:37, 9 October 2023 (UTC)
 * No problem, take your time.  The Blue  Rider  Postal horn icon.svg 08:54, 9 October 2023 (UTC)

Lead

 * Add wikilink to critic in English poet and critic.
 * Linked. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:04, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * For the sake of a more accessible and simpler English, I propose the following:
 * therefrom → from there
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:04, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
 * instilled → implanted
 * I prefer instilled, implanted sounds like an npov violation. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:04, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
 * B.Litt → Bachelor of Letters
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:04, 7 October 2023 (UTC)

Early life

 * Add wikilink to sect in a strict religious sect.
 * Linked. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:05, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Hymns were the first poetry Beer wrote. What were those hymns about?
 * extolling → praise
 * Changed to instilling. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:06, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add wikilink to memoir in a memoir published in 1968.
 * Added. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:13, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Various sources describe her mother as dominant or the dominant parent. How did that impact her? Doesn't  Mrs Beer's House, perhaps, offer any insight into that?
 * Patricia went to Exmouth Grammar School after earning a scholarship, where she continued after her mother's death. Why did her mother die? Why would she not continue after her mother's death?
 * B.Litt → Bachelor of Letters
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:14, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add wikilink to British Institute and add a interlanguage link to Ministero Aeronautica (Ministero dell'aeronautica).
 * Added. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:34, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * On this time in her life, Beer stated she was "enjoying [herself] in a way [she] wasn't allowed to when [she] was a child". Why is that relevant?
 * It shows she was moving away from the strict religious upbringing. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:17, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add the year(s) to the following sentences:
 * Patricia went to Exmouth Grammar School
 * her mother's death
 * She studied English at Exeter University
 * becoming a teacher and academic
 * She took her B.Litt at the University of Oxford
 * she spent seven years in Italy


 * Add wikilink to senior lecturer in she became Senior Lecturer.
 * Linked. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:22, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add wikilink to Victorian in on Victorian women writers
 * Linked to Victorian literature. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:22, 7 October 2023 (UTC)

Style, analysis and themes

 * Contemporary critics influenced Beer, with her stating she could not do her best poetry while thinking about them. Why wasn't she fond of contemporary critics?
 * Add wikilink to simile in incorporating personae and simile.
 * Linked. Therapyisgood (talk) 20:57, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * The following phrase uses incorporating two times in a row, I suggest the following rewrite: she moved from incorporating personae and simile to incorporating metaphor → her writing shifted from the use of personae and similes to incorporating metaphor.
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 20:57, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Beer integrated literary figures native to England into her 1993 work Friend of Heraclitus. Examples of the literally figures native to England?
 * James Persoon and Robert R. Watson of the Encyclopedia of British Poetry, 1900 to the Present cite Gerard Manley Hopkins as an influence... The attribution here seems somewhat futile since both the authors and the encyclopedia are not notable, also it's quite wordy. I suggest the following rewrite: Gerard Manley Hopkins is cited as an influence...
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 20:57, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * The sentence, "legends and landscapes of the West Country also form the background for many of her poems" doesn't fall into WP:QUOTEUSE, so I suggest it to be rephrased as prose.
 * QUOTEUSE is an essay not a policy. Therapyisgood (talk) 21:11, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
 * While that's true, it is still generally good to follow it. This quotation could be easily rewritten as prose, otherwise it can raise concerns about its fair use.  The Blue  Rider  Postal horn icon.svg 12:03, 8 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 03:37, 9 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add wikilink to bucolic in cite the bucolic and rural nature.
 * Linked to wiktionary, our article bucolic is about a style of writing. Therapyisgood (talk) 20:57, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Per the same reasoning, Similarly, Persoon and Watson cite the bucolic...as an influence → Similarly, the bucolic...is thought to have influenced.
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 20:57, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add wikilink to The Gardian in John Mullan of The Guardian.
 * Added. Therapyisgood (talk) 21:07, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Death is a theme throughout her poetry, especially in Autumn (1997). How is the theme employed in the book?
 * though John Mullan of The Guardian described → though The Guardian described
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 21:07, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * The though in ...though John Mullan of The Guardian described... is WP:EDITORIALIZING; it should be removed.
 * OK. Therapyisgood (talk) 21:07, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * described her last book of poetry. Which book is her last?
 * Clarified. Therapyisgood (talk) 21:07, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * ...as "more droll than sad". Mullan called her style overall wry melancholy. Why does he call it that?
 * ...as "more droll than sad". Mullan called her style overall wry melancholy → as "more droll than sad" and that her style is overall wry melancholy
 * Reworded. Therapyisgood (talk) 21:07, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add wikilink to The Independent in Neil Powell of The Independent
 * Added. Therapyisgood (talk) 21:07, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Neil Powell of The Independent cited → The Independent cited
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 21:07, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Her Reader, in which → In her book, Reader, in which
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 21:07, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Her Reader, in which she found Jane Austen's women characters to be wanting due to their chasing marriage, represented feminism's early impact on academic criticism. The independent clause that is between commas is too big and makes the phrase confusing to read.
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 21:07, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Since Harry Blamires is not notable, I suggest the following rewrite: Harry Blamires compared her work to... → Her work was compared to....
 * Harry Blamires is notable. Therapyisgood (talk) 02:55, 11 October 2023 (UTC)


 * He cites her prosaic poems as her real problem. Does Schimdt offer any insight on why he thinks that?
 * Overly lengthy attribution, specially since neither the journal nor the author are notable: In the journal AAA: Arbeiten aus Anglistik und Amerikanistik, Göran Nieragden states Beer's "I" stages ego.... I suggest the removal of the journal attribution.
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 03:16, 11 October 2023 (UTC)

Selected works

 * Remove the italic from All works cited to the following sources.
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:39, 7 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Put the description of the works in parenthesis. Like this: poems → (poems)
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:37, 7 October 2023 (UTC)

Source check

 * Checked sources #1, #2, #5, #7, #8, #12 of this version. No issues found.

Copyvio check

 * Earwig's Copyvio Detector points to 20,6%, mainly due to university, schools and works names/titles.

Stability

 * The article is not  changing significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.

Image check

 * The image is non-free and as so, per WP:NFURG, it should have a copyright tag and a non-free use rationale. The latter is in place but the former is missing. The image is relevant to the topic and has a suitable caption.
 * Former added. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:46, 7 October 2023 (UTC)

Not done yet

 * Contemporary critics influenced Beer, with her stating she could not do her best poetry while thinking about them. Why wasn't she fond of contemporary critics?
 * The specific source to which it's cited doesn't say. But I'll keep looking out for it, if I recall correctly that specific tidbit is in several sources. Therapyisgood (talk) 03:56, 11 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Hymns were the first poetry Beer wrote. What were those hymns about?
 * The source doesn't say but I have a feeling it's in Mrs Beer's House, which I will get soon. Therapyisgood (talk) 03:57, 11 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Various sources describe her mother as dominant or the dominant parent. How did that impact her? Doesn't  Mrs Beer's House, perhaps, offer any insight into that?
 * Patricia went to Exmouth Grammar School after earning a scholarship, where she continued after her mother's death. Why did her mother die? Why would she not continue after her mother's death?
 * Beer integrated literary figures native to England into her 1993 work Friend of Heraclitus. Examples of the literally figures native to England?
 * The source doesn't say ("[l]iterary figures, both fictional and nonfictional, are often incorporated into her poetry, and her 1993 volume Friend of Heraclitus includes both a series of sonnets based on her native region of England and examples of modern imagism"). I've cut the "into her 1993 work Friend of Heraclitus" and added "into works frequently" as that doesn't appear to be supported by the source. I will continue to look for examples of her incorporation of literary figures native to England. Therapyisgood (talk) 03:44, 11 October 2023 (UTC)


 * ...as "more droll than sad". Mullan called her style overall wry melancholy. Why does he call it that?
 * Death is a theme throughout her poetry, especially in Autumn (1997). How is the theme employed in the book?
 * Add the year(s) to the following sentences:
 * Patricia went to Exmouth Grammar School
 * her mother's death
 * Added year. Therapyisgood (talk) 05:56, 11 October 2023 (UTC)
 * She studied English at Exeter University
 * becoming a teacher and academic
 * This is more a summary of the next few sentences and as thus IMO doesn't require a year. Therapyisgood (talk) 06:19, 11 October 2023 (UTC)
 * She took her B.Litt at the University of Oxford
 * she spent seven years in Italy
 * Added last. Therapyisgood (talk) 05:49, 11 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Since Harry Blamires is not notable, I suggest the following rewrite: Harry Blamires compared her work to... → Her work was compared to....
 * Harry Blamires is notable. Therapyisgood (talk) 02:54, 11 October 2023 (UTC)


 * He cites her prosaic poems as her real problem. Does Schimdt offer any insight on why he thinks that?
 * Overly lengthy attribution, specially since neither the journal nor the author are notable: In the journal AAA: Arbeiten aus Anglistik und Amerikanistik, Göran Nieragden states Beer's "I" stages ego.... I suggest the removal of the journal attribution.
 * Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 03:16, 11 October 2023 (UTC)