Talk:Patrick Mullins/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 05:59, 1 May 2019 (UTC)

I'll have a look at this one, will post review as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 05:59, 1 May 2019 (UTC)

Initial review

Infobox
✅, both sourced through his Maryland profile.
 * No source for his full name or height?

Early life
✅, added this into a Personal life section – feel free to check me on that section now. ✅, added.
 * His Maryland profile has the names of his parents and information on a sibling. This could be included I think.
 * Link TopDrawerSoccer to TopDrawerSoccer.com

College and amateur
✅, now reads "the Terrapins were eliminated at that round." ✅, sourced through his Maryland profile.
 * the Terrapins would be eliminated, a use of future tense here. Past tense would suggest were would be a better fit?
 * Final sentence in this section is unsourced. Even though it's just a stats total, it would be better to reference it.

Baton Rouge Capitals

 * Professional Development League is a redirect, pipe the link to USL League Two.
 * This is the only part of the review that I'll dissent on. At the time he played in the league, it was the Premier Development League – that didn't change until this year, and therefore Mullins never actually played under the USL League Two banner. Correct me if I'm entirely incorrect here, but hasn't the policy been to leave that redirect for clarity's sake? 21.colinthompson (talk) 04:25, 7 May 2019 (UTC)

✅, added. ✅, sourced the final sentence to an archived page. ✅, very fair point (especially for an unsourced sentence), removed.
 * Insert (PDL) after Premier Development League to indicate what the abbreviation stands for in future uses.
 * Second part of this paragraph is unsourced.
 * Mullins would not return to the club in subsequent years, is this needed? The season he played in is already mentioned so it seems unnecessary to mention this.

New Orleans Jesters
✅, failed to find a suitable source so I removed the sentence. Its link to U.S. Open Cup is now in the second sentence in this section. 21.colinthompson (talk) 04:25, 7 May 2019 (UTC)
 * End of first paragraph is unsourced.

New England Revolution
✅, thanks for the check on my journalism background – changed to "starting on the right wing". ✅, removed link. 21.colinthompson (talk) 04:25, 7 May 2019 (UTC) ✅, absolutely correct, changed to "he provided an assist on the match-tying goal". 21.colinthompson (talk) 04:25, 7 May 2019 (UTC) ✅, linked through his MLS profile. 21.colinthompson (talk) 04:25, 7 May 2019 (UTC)
 * getting the nod, sounds quite informal. was named or was selected perhaps?
 * Unlink U.S. Open Cup. Per WP:OVERLINK, repeat links should be avoided and the team is linked in the previous section.
 * he provided the match-tying assist on a goal, wasn't the goal match-tying not the assist?
 * Last sentence is unsourced.

New York City FC

 * A query on the use of NYCFC. Obviously it's an abbreviation of New York City F.C but is it an actual nickname of the club? For example Manchester United would be MUFC, but I wouldn't expect to see "Ronaldo scored ten goals for MUFC" on an article if you see what I mean.
 * Both the club and the league use NYCFC as a secondary way to refer to the club. Their official nicknames (which all can be found on their page) could easily be substituted here as well, I just went with the one that was used most often by official sources. Let me know if you think any of the other nicknames work better here, however. 21.colinthompson (talk) 04:25, 7 May 2019 (UTC)
 * No worries, just wanted to clarify that it is used as an official nickname or abbreviation. Kosack (talk) 19:09, 7 May 2019 (UTC)

✅, removed link. 21.colinthompson (talk) 04:25, 7 May 2019 (UTC) ✅, both linked through his MLS profile. 21.colinthompson (talk) 04:25, 7 May 2019 (UTC)
 * Repeat link of U.S. Open Cup in the second paragraph.
 * Last sentence of both paragraphs are unsourced.

D.C. United
✅, removed link. 21.colinthompson (talk) 04:25, 7 May 2019 (UTC)
 * Repeat link of D.C. United in the opening sentence.

Columbus Crew SC
✅, removed both links. 21.colinthompson (talk) 04:25, 7 May 2019 (UTC) ✅, sourced through his MLS profile. 21.colinthompson (talk) 04:25, 7 May 2019 (UTC)
 * Columbus Crew and allocation money both repeat linked in the first sentence.
 * Second half of the paragraph is unsourced.

Career statistics

 * Pipe PDL to avoid the redirect.
 * See above in Baton Rouge Capitals section. 21.colinthompson (talk) 04:25, 7 May 2019 (UTC)