Talk:Patrol Air Cushion Vehicle/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 17:28, 2 March 2019 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:28, 2 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Lede is way too short; it should summarize the entire article in 2 or 3 paragraphs at this length.
 * WP:INFOBOXCITE discourages links in infoboxes. Everything in the infobox should be covered in the main body with cites, so be sure to expand the description.
 * Be sure to provide conversions to metric units and links in the infobox for all measurements, regardless if they're linked or converted in the main body.
 * When did the Army purchase it's PACVs?
 * Tell the reader what kind of engine the 7LM100 is and link to it.
 * Link variable pitch, auxiliary fan, centrifugal fan, radar, intercom,
 * The Decca 202 is a radar with a dish antenna
 * XM-34APD or XM-3 people sniffer?
 * What's a sigma emission and how is that distinctive to humans?
 * What night vision equipment?
 * Down to Operational history. More later once you've dealt with these issues.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:52, 27 March 2019 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback. I'll update my progress below:

--Chumash11 (talk) 23:46, 3 April 2019 (UTC)
 * It's a gas turbine; there's no article for the engine itself
 * figured as much; I've certainly never heard of it.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:19, 4 April 2019 (UTC)
 * XM-3 People Sniffer
 * I'm not finding anything so I removed it.
 * It's a gas turbine; there's no article for the engine itself
 * figured as much; I've certainly never heard of it.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:19, 4 April 2019 (UTC)
 * XM-3 People Sniffer
 * I'm not finding anything so I removed it.
 * XM-3 People Sniffer
 * I'm not finding anything so I removed it.
 * XM-3 People Sniffer
 * I'm not finding anything so I removed it.
 * I'm not finding anything so I removed it.
 * Excellent.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:19, 4 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Where are you on this?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 02:21, 13 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Just finished fixing these issues. Apologies for the delay. Please let me know when you have feedback on the Operational history and Postwar sections. --Chumash11 (talk) 16:32, 21 April 2019 (UTC)
 * terrain and removed from the operation and transferred to another unit missing verb; too many "and"s in the sentence, rephrase
 * In November 1966, the Navy PACVs were used to great effect in Operation Quai Vat (Vietnamese for "Monster", which was what the Viet Cong called the PACVs) in November 1966. Redundant dates
 * taking many enemy prisoners "enemy" is redundant
 * I'm a little confused; who did the PACVs deployed in '66 with TF 117 belong to? The Navy? Clarify at the beginning of the Operational section
 * with the vehicles acquired and unit activated in January before being deployed to Vietnam rephrase
 * and all three Army ACVs were only during June 1969 missing word?
 * Down to Postwar.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:03, 29 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Changes have been made; ready for Postwar whenever you are. --Chumash11 (talk) 00:22, 2 May 2019 (UTC)
 * A special hangar for the ACVs was built at the Coast Guard Station at Fort Point starting in August 1970 and reaching completion in 1972, and at least one PACV was active in the San Francisco Bay 24/7. Awkward, rephrase.
 * Oakland International Airport, which they were found to be successful at. rephrase
 * Do not use "the" X Bay, that's ungrammatical.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 02:16, 13 May 2019 (UTC)
 * Made the first two changes. Thank you for your patience. I'm not sure I understand the last suggestion; do you mean that phrases like "the San Francisco Bay" are incorrect? --Chumash11 (talk) 21:25, 18 May 2019 (UTC)
 * Yes, "the" is redundant when used with the full name of the bay.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:27, 18 May 2019 (UTC)