Talk:Paul Henderson/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tomcat7 (talk · contribs) 20:27, 22 November 2012 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Passing it. Here are a few nitpicks:
 * "pee-wee tournament" - is it jargon, or teenage slang, or something totally different? Perhaps reword or link it.
 * It is the name of an age level of minor hockey, which I have now linked to
 * "history and physical education teacher" - highschool, college, university?
 * Sources don't say. Only that he thought of quitting hockey to become a teacher.
 * I am not sure if you need to put a comma after "however" in ", however the Detroit Red Wings". I think there should be a semicolon ahead this word and a comma after it.
 * Reworded slightly
 * " when they completed one of the biggest trades in league history to that time on March 3, 1968.[26]" - do you know the sum?
 * It was a six-player trade, however quantifying these deals is always tough, as the "size" of a trade is often not just the number of players, but the quality of them too. I've noted it was a six player trade, regardless.
 * "He also suffered torn chest muscles" - I added "from", correct me if I am wrong--Tomcat (7) 12:30, 24 November 2012 (UTC)
 * That should be fine. Thanks for the review, I appreciate it! Resolute 14:56, 24 November 2012 (UTC)