Talk:Paul Richey/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 15:14, 13 October 2023 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 15:14, 13 October 2023 (UTC)

Prelim

 * RAF Fighter Command and No. 609 Squadron RAF are duplicated links
 * Fixed. Zawed (talk) 07:50, 16 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Article is stable
 * Images correctly licensed
 * Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

 * Link flying ace
 * Move Second World War link to first mention
 * Link sorties
 * "in the Imphal Valley"?
 * All of the above done. Zawed (talk) 09:02, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Did Richey actually command 609 Sqn?
 * Yes he did although I realised I missed mentioning this in the lead. Have fixed this oversight and made a few other tweaks. Zawed (talk) 09:02, 22 October 2023 (UTC)

Early life

 * Do we know the name of his father or mother?
 * Added name of father. Zawed (talk) 03:19, 25 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Link fighter
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 03:19, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

Second World War etc

 * The Second World War is not explicitly mentioned until the last line of the entire article!
 * Rephrased the first sentence! Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)


 * "Shot down the same day after the engagement with the Bf 110s" does this mean he was shot down by the 110s, or something else? (ibid next sentence)
 * Have rephrased both these sentences. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Link Ashton Down
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Link engine coolant
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Not sure Bar needs capitalising?
 * I've started doing this since noticing that the postnominal template capitalises it. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)


 * "was published"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)


 * "with a posting to No. 56 Squadron" stipulate that he was in command of it
 * Doublechecking my source, I found made a mistake here and conflated his commands of Nos. 56 and 609 Squadron. I have revised the discussion of No 56 Squadron accordingly. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)


 * "December 1942" repeated year
 * Deleted 1942. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Any operational history for No. 189 Wing?
 * No, unfortunately I don't have access to any sources dealing with the RAF campaign in Burma. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)


 * "He was subsequently worked" needs a rejig
 * Fixed. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Burma campaign isn't mentioned in main text
 * I've removed this from the infobox since I can't determine the nature of No. 189 Wing's role in the campaign. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)