Talk:Paul Roach/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 17:13, 7 September 2023 (UTC)

I'll review this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk)  @ 17:13, 7 September 2023 (UTC)

Comments
Looks good, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk)  @ 14:53, 13 September 2023 (UTC)
 * I copyedited the article here. Let me know if you disagree with any of the edits.
 * I also archived the references.
 * Roach developed a reputation as one of the best "offensive minds" in the NFL and was hired as offensive coordinator by the Green Bay Packers in 1975, the first person ever to hold the position - I am guessing you mean he was he first OC the Packers ever had? If so, clarify that by adding "for the Packers" or something like that to the end.
 * Changed.
 * Roach earned all-conference honors in football twice[a] while playing end and in the backfield and was team captain as a senior., if the sources differ on two or three, why not say that in the article? What made you choose "twice"?
 * I might have seen a second source stating he was selected twice, but I can't remember. I just changed it to "two or three times" with a note that sources conflict.
 * Ref spot check:
 * Checked #2, 4, 8, 11, 18, 22, 24
 * I've addressed both of the issues, BeanieFan11 (talk) 17:59, 13 September 2023 (UTC)
 * Passing. « Gonzo fan2007  (talk)  @ 18:15, 13 September 2023 (UTC)