Talk:Peasants' revolt in Palestine/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cerebellum (talk · contribs) 12:21, 28 July 2015 (UTC)

Hello! I will be reviewing this article. --Cerebellum (talk) 12:21, 28 July 2015 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * The prose is good overall, but I noticed a few issues: You might want to rethink the way you've structured the "Events preceding the revolt" section. It seems like you're structuring it in terms of the different groups that were alienated, and if you think that's the best way that's fine, but it confused me because you start off by talking about May 1834, an abrupt jump from December 1831, the end of the last paragraph. You then backtrack to 1833 and then 1832.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * You should clarify footnote 17 - I assume it's a chapter in Clash of Identities, but it's not stated in the footnote. You should also indicate page numbers. I was curious about the translation of nezzam as professional soldiers, since I've not heard that before and that meaning is not listed in the Hans Wehr Dictionary, so please let me know if the source is available online.  I'm not saying the source is wrong - it may be an archaic or Egyptian dialect-specific use of the word.  Also, footnote 26 is a dead link.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * Lots of images, well-selected to enhance the article.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * You can deal with the quibbles above if you want to improve the article further, but it clearly meets the GA standard. Pass.  --Cerebellum (talk) 19:41, 30 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the pass. I wrote the "Events preceding revolt" section in a kind of summary breakdown of how Ibrahim Pasha's policies alienated the different factions in Palestine where I guess chronological order was thrown out of the window. I'll try to reconfigure it because I don't want it to confuse readers. I'll clarify footnote 17, and footnote 26 could be replaced by a source that I believe is already present in the article. Thanks again, Cheers --Al Ameer (talk) 22:31, 30 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Sounds good, thanks for your diligence on this article and all the others you've worked on! --Cerebellum (talk) 00:04, 31 July 2015 (UTC)
 * You can deal with the quibbles above if you want to improve the article further, but it clearly meets the GA standard. Pass.  --Cerebellum (talk) 19:41, 30 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the pass. I wrote the "Events preceding revolt" section in a kind of summary breakdown of how Ibrahim Pasha's policies alienated the different factions in Palestine where I guess chronological order was thrown out of the window. I'll try to reconfigure it because I don't want it to confuse readers. I'll clarify footnote 17, and footnote 26 could be replaced by a source that I believe is already present in the article. Thanks again, Cheers --Al Ameer (talk) 22:31, 30 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Sounds good, thanks for your diligence on this article and all the others you've worked on! --Cerebellum (talk) 00:04, 31 July 2015 (UTC)