Talk:People (The 1975 song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:49, 25 January 2021 (UTC)

After your amazing response to my last review, I will take this article on! --K. Peake 06:49, 25 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Wooo thank you!  Gia co bbe  talk 13:46, 25 January 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * List the producers under their full names in the infobox since this is not a track listing ✅
 * "on 22 August 2019 through" → "on 22 August 2019, through" ✅
 * Wikilink lead single instead ✅
 * Target heavy rock to Hard rock ✅
 * Target chords to Chord (music) ✅
 * "and sonic departure from" → "and the sonic departure from the band's third studio album," ✅
 * "In the band's native" → "In the 1975's native" ✅
 * UK Singles chart → UK Singles Chart ✅
 * Shouldn't the above chart be mentioned before the rock & metal one since it is the UK's main chart? ✅
 * "in Scotland, and" → "in Scotland and" ✅
 * "and received comparisons to" → "and was compared to" ✅

Background

 * Retitle to Background and recording ✅
 * "21 February 2020 and later for" → "21 February and later for" to avoid writing the same year twice in one sentence ✅
 * "Minor Threat, and" → "Minor Threat and" because the article is written in British English ✅
 * "revealed its origin stemmed" → "revealed the song's origins stemmed" ✅
 * Target controversial ban to Abortion in Alabama ✅
 * "yelling obscenities" the source mentions them booing, so reword accordingly ✅
 * "at the band." → "at the 1975." ✅
 * Remove capitalisation for open carry ✅
 * "was furious, and wrote" → "was furious and wrote" ✅
 * Remove release year of "The 1975" from brackets since you have stated it earlier in that very sentence, plus none of the other songs of the title are mentioned ✅
 * [14] only shows the music video, which does not back up the song's release as a single; try this instead, which is already used in the comp section ✅

Composition

 * Retitle to Composition and lyrics ✅
 * Sample looks good!
 * Thank you!  Gia co bbe  talk 13:46, 25 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "two minutes and forty seconds" → "two minutes and 40 seconds" but the length is not sourced; add Tidal at the end of the sentence preferably ✅
 * I added the Apple Music link since I've already got an archived version of it.  Gia co bbe  talk 13:46, 25 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "heavy rock instrumentation built upon" → "heavy rock instrumentation, built upon" with the target ✅
 * Target chords to Chord (music) ✅
 * "breakneck drums and "renegade" percussion" are not backed up by [23] and cannot be viewed since even [24]'s oldest archive does not load ✅
 * musicOMH has a pseudo-adblock/paywall pop-up lower down on the page. It won't let you search until you clear it. I've removed the entire ref, though. Not sure why it was there.  Gia co bbe  talk 13:46, 25 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "Death From Above, and" → "Death From Above and" ✅
 * "that its use of" → "that the song's use of" ✅
 * "Queens of the Stone Age, and said" → "Queens of the Stone Age and saying" ✅
 * Target pop to Pop music ✅
 * Remove wikilink on Death From Above ✅
 * "His vocal delivery on" → "Healy's vocal delivery on" ✅
 * "with a screaming rallying call" → "with a screaming call" since the rallying part is unsourced ✅
 * "Healy condemns personal" → "Healy condemns both personal" ✅
 * The first letter of the quotes should be capitalised since it's a full line ✅
 * "are funny / But we" the source presents these as being part of the same line
 * It contradicts the lyrics published in the liner notes. I've already sourced it in the "Credits and personnel" section. Should I cite it here as well?  Gia co bbe  talk 13:46, 25 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Yes you should cite it here too; that is not violating WP:REPCITE. --K. Peake 13:51, 25 January 2021 (UTC) ✅


 * "embraced the angst" → "embraces the angst" ✅
 * "was to: "[tell] listeners" → "is to "[tell] listeners" ✅

Critical reception

 * Retitle to Reception, as everything in the lead needs to be written out in the body so the commercial reception should be added here ✅
 * "received positive reviews from" → "was met with positive reviews from" ✅
 * "from the band's fanbase" → "from the 1975's fanbase" ✅
 * [24] is not needed since [30] is enough to back the fanbase info up ✅
 * "sounded like: "he's" → "sounds like "he's" ✅
 * Are you sure Euphoria is reliable per WP:SELFPUB?
 * Yes. It's a (new-ish) digital magazine, but has already amassed an impressive and diverse portfolio. I forgot to italicize.  Gia co bbe  talk 13:46, 25 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "saw it as a radical departure from the band's" → "saw the former as a radical departure from the 1975's" ✅
 * "breaking a skateboard"." → "breaking a skateboard."" per MOS:QUOTE ✅
 * "debate to rest"." → "debate to rest."" ✅
 * "Cerys Kenneally of" → "Cerys Kenneally from" to avoid repetitiveness ✅
 * "Smith said it was:" → "Smith said it is," ✅
 * "a revolution, man"." → "a revolution, man."" ✅
 * Create a third para for chart positions, as that is not enough to warrant its own section ✅

Music video

 * Wikilink music video on the img text ✅
 * "designed the band's hair" → "designed the 1975's hair" ✅
 * "To make Healy look "toxic"," → "To make Healy look real and "a bit toxic"," ✅
 * "used in the video, meant to" → "that are used in the video, with them being meant to" ✅
 * "the second is shown scanning the band's" → "while the second is shown scanning the band members" ✅
 * The small part for the cube is not backed up ✅
 * Target LED to LED display ✅
 * The lights are not described as flashing ✅
 * "yellow suits. Kirsten Sprunch" → "yellow suits; Kirsten Sprunch" ✅
 * "Chris DeVille of Stereogum compared Healy's" → "DeVille compared Healy's" ✅
 * "a sentiment shared by" → "with the latter sentiment being shared by" ✅
 * "Koltan Greenwood of the" → "Koltan Greenwood of" ✅
 * "Moreland of Pitchfork compared Healy's" → "Moreland compared Healy's" ✅
 * "saying the video" → saying the visual" ✅

Credits and personnel

 * Good

Charts

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION ✅

Final comments and verdict

 * until everything is fixed, after a review that was quite quick! --K. Peake 11:21, 25 January 2021 (UTC)
 * That was indeed a very quick review, always appreciated!  Gia co bbe  talk 14:36, 25 January 2021 (UTC)


 * I believe I've resolved all of your comments. Anything that I missed?  Gia co bbe  talk 14:37, 25 January 2021 (UTC)
 * This looks very good now, but shouldn't you introduce A Brief Inquiry into Online Relationships in the lead like how I suggested? --K. Peake 14:59, 25 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Must have missed that. It is fixed.  Gia co bbe  talk 15:02, 25 January 2021 (UTC)
 * You missed the comma, but that is very minor so I added it for you. ✅ now and I did notice in the background section that you have bared in mind my comments for your previous GAN when editing this article; I tip my hat to you for this! --K. Peake 15:05, 25 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Whoops, thank you for fixing that. Awesome! Another great review. In regards to the previous GAN, I certainly did utilize the advice from your comments there in this article. I always strive to grow as an editor by incorporating tips, advice, and experience from every reviewer. It helps not only myself, but Wikipedia as a whole to have strong, well-written articles! Cheers!  Gia co bbe  talk 15:11, 25 January 2021 (UTC)