Talk:People Move On/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ippantekina (talk · contribs) 01:39, 20 August 2022 (UTC)

Will review this within a week-- Ippantekina (talk) 01:39, 20 August 2022 (UTC)

Lead

 * "before starting his solo career" was he part of a band/project before?
 * McAlmont & Butler – mentioned earlier in the sentence. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

Background

 * "produced Hopper's sole album" do you mean solo?
 * Sole – their only album. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)


 * ", and contemplated what to do with his life, and decided to start a solo career" the first "and" is redundant
 * Link demo

Writing and production

 * "would like to collaborate Ashcroft" collaborate with
 * The wikilink to Makoto Sakamoto is an article about a Japanese athlete. Do you think the wikilink is correct?
 * Link mixing
 * Link mastering

Composition and lyrics

 * "compared to the work of Jeff Buckley, Young, and Wilco" is "Young" here Neil Young?
 * "Drawing influences from classic rock from the late 1960s and 1970s, Lucy O'Brien of The Independent wrote" grammar
 * "Though Butler has stressed that it isn't a "retro record".[25]" grammar
 * Link jargon terms like crescendo and coda

Critical reception

 * Link vinyl
 * I've linked it in the Reissues section instead. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

Reception

 * The Birmingham Post quote is too long; consider trimming it down

Overall

 * Putting this for seven days. Ippantekina (talk) 01:52, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Made most of the changes, but see above for comments. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you for addressing the comments. I have one remaining issue with refs/harv. Ippantekina (talk) 08:43, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Done. MusicforthePeople (talk) 09:00, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Passing-- Ippantekina (talk) 09:02, 22 August 2022 (UTC)