Talk:Performance Review/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 04:24, 11 September 2012 (UTC)

I'll take this one.  Ruby  2010/  2013  04:24, 11 September 2012 (UTC)

Comments

 * "...about their romantic relationship from the previous episode." - I prefer the link be used with " previous episode", not just "episode"
 * onset -> on-set
 * "Dwight's fitness orb" - is orb the right word? I thought it was a fitness ball? Or is that what Dwight calls it?
 * Yeah, It's called that by Dwight.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   19:17, 12 September 2012 (UTC)
 * "...much to Michael's chagrin" - is chagrin the right word here? Anger? Displeasure?
 * Perhaps you want to note that Wilmore guest starred in a previous episode?
 * "...one of the very first season two episodes aired." -> one of the very first episodes of the second season.
 * "When the episode was being formulated..." - the episode - Performance Review (reminds people what ep you're talking about)
 * rehearsed "about ten time" - ten times?
 * initial lines give to Steve Carell and Melora Hardin -> given
 * I noted in the production section that you use the crew names inconsistently (Krasinksi but then Rainn Wilson, etc.). I think it would look better if you use their surnames (unless they aren't mentioned previously, like Angela Kinsey)
 * Hardin recalled that is was extremely difficult -> it was?
 * Link for The Office Cast (2007). The Office Convention 2007 Cast Q&A. (Interview). The Office: Overtime: NBC.?
 * I'm not sure what you mean here. Its a DVD extra on the Office: Overtime DVD, but I can't seem to find a link to the Overtime DVD on Wikipedia.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   19:17, 12 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Sorry, I didn't realize!  Ruby  2010/  2013  15:05, 13 September 2012 (UTC)


 * Link Oscar
 * When was the Seitz review published? I'm curious because it mentions the best episodes of the series
 * I'm not sure, as it doesn't readily have its date, but it looks like it goes all the way to "Niagara".-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   19:17, 12 September 2012 (UTC)
 * "In fact, Wilson later claimed that Dwight's line about laser tag caused "quite a buzz" online" - not a fan of the "in fact" part
 * see 4 September 4, 2012 and 4 September 2012 (use consistent formatting)

Mostly minor issues, so nice work. I got some of them, but for others I didn't want to change anything without hearing a possible response back first. I'll place it on hold for seven days.  Ruby  2010/  2013  03:53, 12 September 2012 (UTC)
 * I believe I've gotten everything and responded to specific ones above. Thank you for the review!-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   19:17, 12 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Looks good. Passing this one for GA. Nice work!  Ruby  2010/  2013  15:05, 13 September 2012 (UTC)