Talk:Pero Qué Necesidad/GA2

GA Review
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Nominator: 17:48, 11 March 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:07, 2 June 2024 (UTC)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
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 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Pass/fail:

Of course we've been in reviews together for the past so you know what to expect; this one should be done quickly! --K. Peake 08:07, 2 June 2024 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Change Soundabout Studio to Soundabout per Template:Infobox song
 * The translation title can be written out in the body, rather than invoking the ref in the lead
 * "Its production was handled by" → "The song was produced by" and also add written by Juan Gabriel since the lead is short enough that you could do with this inclusion
 * "The song is a" → "It is a" to sound less repetitive
 * "It was released" → "The song was released"
 * "with critics listing" → "with a few critics listing"
 * The term "several" being used is redundant
 * Add a comma before whose in the last sentence

Background and composition

 * Add the release year of "Heal the World" on the audio sample
 * "a hiatus following legal disputes" → "a hiatus after legal disputes"
 * "The dispute involved Gabriel" → "The dispute involved Juan Gabriel" to be consistent
 * "but would not be released" → "but it would not be released"
 * "and Gabriel renewed his" → "and Juan Gabriel renewed his"
 * "both the name of the album" → "both the album's title of" removing the brackets since they would not be needed in this case
 * "in which lyrics describes" → "in which the lyrics describe"
 * "He re-recorded the track" → "Juan Gabriel re-recorded the track"

Promotion and reception

 * Per the Los Angeles Times ref currently used in the lead, add a second sentence with the translated title and mention the Spanish radio from that ref
 * "brotherhood". It features children" → "brotherhood", featuring children" to improve the flow
 * "Ramiro Burr wrote for the" → "Ramiro Burr, writing for the"
 * "compared it to ABBA" → "compared the song to ABBA"
 * "despite its "serious theme", he found it" → "despite the "serious theme", he found the song"
 * "Classic Rock reviewer ranked it" → "a Classic Rock reviewer ranked the song" and the source shows number seven for me, not number three
 * "Gabriel earned the" → "Juan Gabriel earned the"
 * "Commercially, it topped" → "Commercially, the track topped"

Charts

 * Why is this table not present when the song did reach charts?

Final thoughts and verdict

 * until everything is covered; this article passes a lot of the criterion but some changes are needed to get it over the line! --K. Peake 08:48, 2 June 2024 (UTC)
 * @Kyle Peake Thanks as always for the reviews! I addressed everything mentioned, but I wasn't sure what you meant with the LA Times article for the translation so I did the best as I understood. Erick (talk) 23:50, 2 June 2024 (UTC)
 * @Erick Thank you, however "compared it to ABBA" needs to use the song instead and wikilink La Tercera on ref 7; the translation source is exactly to my liking fab job! --K. Peake 09:12, 3 June 2024 (UTC)
 * @Kyle Peake ✅ Erick (talk) 15:39, 3 June 2024 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, thanks for the quick fixes here! --K. Peake 17:26, 3 June 2024 (UTC)