Talk:Persona (series)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Rhain1999 (talk · contribs) 06:54, 8 August 2015 (UTC)

I'll be taking this one, as discussed. Expect some comments within the next few days. I look forward to reading through this! – Rhain1999  (talk to me) 06:54, 8 August 2015 (UTC)

Review
All references look good; the fact that you consistently manage to find so many useful Japanese references is really impressive (I'm trying something similar with another article, and it's proving quite difficult). Also, bonus points for archiving. Images look good too; some editors might think that four non-free files is pushing it a little bit, but I'll let it slide (particularly due to their rationales).

Spin-offs

 * Consider replacing the period between "released worldwide in 2014" and "While a spin-off..." with a semicolon. Not necessary, but I think it might flow better.
 * There's a lot of Japanese translations in this section, and it does interrupt the text quite a bit. I won't let it hold the review, but perhaps they could be added to footnotes, in a similar fashion to Tales of Xillia? Just a suggestion.
 * "they are..." confused me for a second. Consider changing to "there is...".

Music

 * "Aria of the Soul" requires quotation marks.

Release

 * Mention at the least the year that Persona Q was released for the 3DS.
 * I know that "PlayStation Network" was mentioned earlier, in the "Titles" section, but it might be worth clarifying what "PSN" means, upon the first instance (perhaps you could clarify this in the "Titles" section, in which case I might do the same for "PSP").
 * "The same went for..." sounds a bit informal; perhaps "The same change was made for..."?

Reception

 * Italicise "Persona" in the second paragraph ("Examining Persona reveals three...").
 * I would have expected more Japanese reviews/opinions here, but I guess they're not the easiest to locate/translate. Just an observation.

That's all I could find; just a few minor changes (mostly suggestions/points for discussion). This is a really well-written article, and you should be proud of it. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Just putting it on hold until some minor changes are made. – Rhain1999  (talk to me) 10:39, 9 August 2015 (UTC)
 * I've taken care of everything above that I could. As to Japanese sources, if I could have found any that talked of the series like the English ones did, I would have put them in. Japanese press don't talk about things like this in the same way we do. It's a problem with most Japanese video game series. I was a little worried about the images too at first, but I feel that they help with reading, as going through all that text alone would be a real slog without images to help with illustration. --ProtoDrake (talk) 12:41, 9 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Thank you for doing that so quickly and professionally. I understand what you mean with regards to Japanese sources; that's interesting to know. I also agree with the images, and that they help with the reading. Everything looks good now! Here you go: . – Rhain1999  (talk to me) 12:48, 9 August 2015 (UTC)